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    dots Submission Name: I'm so hateddots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 543
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 776



    Description:
       those who choose to comment: do not tell me about missspelled words, or that it is all abunch of random thoughts, because that is just what I want it to be,
    what you think when somebody fucks you over!

    Brittany: if you read this, remember, in no way is this directed toward you


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    dotsI'm so hateddots
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    anybody body can tell you a lie
    say that they love you when they want you to die
    They say they won't hurt you but its what they're will do
    that one thing that you say the won't do
    if your best friend fucks your girl
    if your own family talks about you when you love them
    It hurts
    and there's nothing you can do
    you don't want to see that person hurt
    But obviously they don't care
    What it is that they want
    well it doesn't matter
    They love like they hate
    in all directions
    much like you, but you out of fear
    and them out of custom
    just to do it
    wheres the love in that
    there is none
    can't trust any one




    Submitted on 2005-07-27 14:38:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      your poem seems very plain. kind of dull. it must be just me but it doesnt have much of a flow or anything. it needs alot of work. but i do understand your message. which is true.
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
      good message i think we can all relate, grammar could be better, but to me it look like it has alot of potential if you work with it
    rock on
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by death_sgaze | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...as soon as i read like the second line i like died...this is sad...is it about Brittany?j/w u aint gotta tell me...wow...favorites...ur too good at writing...man some people dont listen huh...WHO CARES ABOUT THE FUKKING GRAMMER DAMMIT!get it through ur think skulls...damm...**sighs**

    -Suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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