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    dots Submission Name: Pinprick's Pleasuredots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPinprick's Pleasuredots
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    The cool rain falls
    against my warm flesh
    sensual accupuncture
    making me shudder
    as the sensations
    travel up my spine
    to my weary brain.




    Submitted on 2004-04-12 22:45:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ooo...this sent shivers up my spine... i love this... i love the rain and how it feels on bare skin... i really like this...very sensual poem
    | Posted on 2004-04-17 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      good write, it seem as what i thought by the title, but i really liked it great imagery!
    | Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Just an idea.... I think "The rain falls cool" instead of the "The cool rain falls." would sound really great.....I dunno. There is nothing here to critique. I loved the image...The goose bumpy jolt of conflicting temperatures that are like electricity to the brain....How refreshing!
    | Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      again l i really like it. you dont need to add anything this gets the point across just fine. keep up the awesome work!!
    | Posted on 2004-04-12 00:00:00 | by Spankey | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, it's short and to the point... not to sound weird, but it sounds like a fantesy(lol), just sayin... Keep it up...
    | Posted on 2004-04-12 00:00:00 | by Darkest Flaw | [ Reply to This ]


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