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    dots Submission Name: Small Town Ohiodots
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    Author: melancholystar
    ASL Info:    17/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    4.53 - 598/302/32
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       I recently visited my old home in Ohio. It's located in a very small town and it always seems the same when I go back... people that are born there... grow old there... and this was just my ranting on the whole thing..


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    dotsSmall Town Ohiodots
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    A solitary place is frozen in time,
    It is forever remaining,
    Completely unchanged.

    Everyone here is trapped in unlocked cages,
    They are completely satisfied,
    With their simple lifestyles.

    They never can leave this place,
    Never will they get to experience,
    The rest of the world.

    None of them seem to know or care,
    That there is just so much more,
    That they are missing.





    Submitted on 2005-07-27 15:28:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lol... i hail from an air force base in south korea. surprisingly, that it seems to be the one air base people don't move away from. i lived the for 6 years, left, came back 3 years later and almost everyone i went to elem. school with was still there... can only handle some much...
    lord knows why we as people decide not to leave unpopulated locations. it's one of life's greatest mysteries...
    -hybrid
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by hybridmagnolia | [ Reply to This ]
      When I finished reading your poem, all I got was that this is one a small town where the people never leave. I suggest you add more on why the people want to stay, is it out of fear or ignorance? Also, I did like the simplicity of the poem. It is short and concise. I think this piece, overall, is good.
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by Lee Minsu | [ Reply to This ]
      This is the description of so many little towns across America, hell probably across the world - it reminds me of where I live - in Ohio :)
    You have successfully described where I grew up - where I left because they were so behind the times and "frozen" there. Where I left because they are all so old fashioned and close-minded. Where I wake up every morning since coming back...
    I liked this ...hope your visit back was pleasant and not too long
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]



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