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    dots Submission Name: Clothed in Icedots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsClothed in Icedots

    When you returned you were clothed in ice.
    How could time in the sun
    reveal in you its opposite?
    You're such an enigma;
    perhaps in Alaska you'd melt,
    but I can feel in your chilly embrace
    that we are drifting apart
    like an iceberg drifting
    from it's mother glacier.

    Submitted on 2004-04-12 23:03:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Perhaps in Alaska you'd melt"
    That line made me smile. it's definately strange how people go through things and you'd expect them to be one way, yet they start doing the opposite. o_0
    | Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by MusingMinstrel | [ Reply to This ]
      Kind of like "absence makes the heart grow fonder" in reverse....Spending time apart it is realized that they no longer want the person anymore.....What a sad testimony to love's tragic ending.
    | Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      I think thats cool. i like all your stuff. but if you added a little itd be even better. and i really know how it feels to be losing someone you feel so strongly about. but things always turn out for the best!
    | Posted on 2004-04-12 00:00:00 | by Spankey | [ Reply to This ]
      brrr.... i like this, dumplin. i can so relate, too. sometimes one just turns cold. reminds me of my "you're cold." great imagery. the iceberg thing says it all! brava!
    | Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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