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    dots Submission Name: Non-existant Wordsdots
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    Author: Samuel Bielz
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 151/182/46
    Words: 287
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 280
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Well, not the most poeticly correct piece, but isn't poetry about expression anyways? I know this may draw some dramatic critiques, but I figured I'd post it and see what happens.


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    I've spent 10 minutes staring at this page,
    I cant seem to come up with significant words.
    All I want is to tell you how I feel,
    All I want is to write you a poem.
    I cannot seem to come up with the right words,
    -I think they might not exist.

    But to kill the time and release my anguish,
    I am just typing these random thoughts.
    Not the greatest work, I can admit
    But maybe the right words will find me.
    -If they do infact exist.

    The way I feel when I hear your voice,
    It always makes me smile.
    I've not smiled as much in all my life,
    As I have since I met you.
    -Nope, still not the words,
    Maybe they really dont exist.

    Everytime I think of you, my love
    Those damned butterflies i can feel.
    The pure thought of you, it melts my heart,
    You are all I ever wanted, I love you.
    -Still not them, I really hope they exist.

    I realy hate these 26 letters,
    They are seeming so useless right now.
    If I was with you, I know I could show you
    Exactly how I feel about you.
    -But i can't seem to find the words

    The only way to show you is to hold you in my arms,
    Damn these long-distant relations.
    All these emotions are crammed inside me
    They need their release,
    -I really need these words to exist.

    I have found the one way to show you
    Exactly just how I feel about you.
    If you would spend the rest of your life,
    Sheltered in my arms, as my wife
    -The need for words woud cease to exist




    Submitted on 2005-07-27 20:47:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey baby! I finally read this poem! I love it! (Especially the part about the butterflies.) No one has ever made me feel as special and important as you do hunny. (Nor has anyone brought happy tears to my eyes like you do.) I love you so much. Thank you for being mine!
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by countrygirl0261 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was incredibly sweet and I really loved it! It's so easy to speak words, it's all in your actions and you really got that. This is definately one lucky person to have you feeling the way that you are. Poetry is all in the way that you put your words across, you did it just fine! I really loved this and wish you the best!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      Hello , aaaaawwww wow this is beautiful , i hope u have shown her , love isnt always about saying how you feel but showing how you feel just in the little things you do , like a kiss on the head , or a gentle touch they all add up and make the person feel special and wanted.
    great job
    take care
    Lainie x
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]
      well well well look who found his poetic voice once again. great job sam i thought this was terrific. im sure that whomever this is for will love it if they ever get to see it. i think it would make her cry. its really that sweet. and if and when she does say yes maybe than you can find the words you need and possibly still show her. if thats what you want. anyhow take care...Joy
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      *wipes tears away* awww... this is so good!
    such devotion nowadays is almost non existant so it does me good to see that somewhere there's someone with at least a shred of it.
    okay, sorry, that sounded weird.
    -what do you mean that this isn't the most poetically correct piece? whatever flows out of your heart and down your pen is poetry and i happen to like this piece very much.
    wonderful write, keep it up!
    -the wildchild
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by wildchild | [ Reply to This ]



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