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    dots Submission Name: DEATH’S LULLABYdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 588
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       this was written by my sister and i love it cause it is the first one we worked on togeather

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    dotsDEATH’S LULLABYdots

    Promise you’ll always love me
    Promise you’ll never die
    When death’s dark wing’s come for me,
    Please promise you wont cry
    While all of life is sleeping, in bed awake you lie
    Alone a whisper find’s you,
    A sweet and soft goodbye
    With final breath,for you I sing
    Death’s lullaby

    BY: Shawna Price

    Submitted on 2005-07-27 21:51:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I dont think length is important if you get out what you need to express. I really like how you worded everything. It created a great flow, so everything came together to get your feelings across.
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Dr. Revenant | [ Reply to This ]
      [censored]ng love it rate it no.1 im gonna recommend it to every one to read specially the last line it was aswome keep writing more when u do can u send them to me on sex_skating_and_rockinrole@hotmail.com
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by Red Liquid | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah, i agree with Kacela Kali, i do wish it was longer, i was looking forward for it being longer.. but it is really well written good job! I'm making it a fav
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]
      I wish it was longer, I really enjoyed the concept. That even in death a final goodbyr can be made through mourning. It had a really good rhyming scheme and I liked the format. Keep up the good work. You and your sister work well together.
    | Posted on 2005-07-27 00:00:00 | by Kacela Kali | [ Reply to This ]
      Short piece but it moves me. The last two lines are bittersweet, dramatic so as it encores. I like the soft style yet deep expression you and your sister made. Looking for more from you.
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by eminvisible | [ Reply to This ]

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