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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 694
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       i wrote this when i was going through alot of medical problems and the future seemed a bit bleakit came to me that we take everything for granted and that cant do that anymore


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    In a crimson day dream , nothing is what it seems. These people are not persons .They are to too mindless, too wondering. Forever grasping for some long forgotten memory. Something that might somehow cleanse A stricken soul. All the living time combined will never be enough ,all the money , the power will never fill this void as we speak we are suffocating .
    I can no longer waste what sanity is left here. I have given up on the cure. Learned to live in the pain , and I will die young never understanding, never truly being free. Its is ok though there is peace here. I have done more then most. And when the gates open in receiving , I will be sure it is my hand that made my fate




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      now that im getting a feel for your style i am able to enjoy your writing much more im glade you liked red too comments mean more when they come from someone whose writing you admire thanks
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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