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    dots Submission Name: Transcenddots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    I never wished
    yet always knew...
    Love truly transcends
    all space and time ~

    A wave crashes
    gently to the shore
    and is in motion....
    sublime ~ ~

    Envelop me
    a sacred

    No time, no space
    no earthly

    Paint us
    Life's gracious
    Hues ~ ~ ~

    You my Lover,
    I your
    Muse ~ * ~

    Submitted on 2005-07-28 12:02:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tiffany, your expression of things we feel is wonderful. A beautiful love poem. Your lover is fortunate to have you for muse. - Jim
    | Posted on 2011-10-16 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks Tiffany, this is a view of universal love and just what I needed right now. You seem to find my moods and be in them before I even visit your page.

    Your minimalist style shines through as all of this is just right. Thanks for being who you are and sharing with us. Beautiful job.
    peace and love,
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      this is simply beautiful Tiff. ahhh, feels like a deep cleansing breath...
    this is a new fave my friend.. what a treasure you are.
    @ Cat
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Some nice imagery here, and you finish it up well. The phrase 'wave crashes / gently' seemed a bit off [unless being oxymoronic was your intent]. Other than that a good piece. Loved the last stanza. Nice work.


    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this would be better as lyrics to be sang, maybe add a couple choruses and I think it would be a nice song, the title is modern sounding which is good.
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a wonderful surprise Tiff. Not like the other writings I have read of yours. You used a rhyme scheme for this that wasn't forced but flowed beautifully without compromising your message. Starts out invitingly and ends strongly with what I find to be the best stanza of the poem "You my Lover,
    I your
    Muse ~ * ~" Bravo.
    `always write poetry, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      OH Epip- my friend
    what you trying to do, outdo my mushyness for love peoms?? Well hun, it seems you have done me so much better. I really enjoyed this piece. " Paint us life's gracious hues" BEAUTIFUL!

    your friend
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      This is just so cute...

    Short and simple, and sweet.

    You my Lover,
    I your
    Muse ~ * ~

    I love your last line,
    For some reason it makes me think of pure laughter...
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]
      "no earthly Measure!"

    i love this line / it brings on so many views / the unlimited insightfullness this line has- is so crafty- it just screams art!. the poem from a standing point is wavie - but it works so well good job!
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]

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