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    dots Submission Name: Love from The Mathematiciandots
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    Author: amateur
    Elite Ratio:    4.86 - 19/22/11
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       venting (lil hidden poem). say whatever you want. i's are imaginary numbers: it's impossible to take the square root of a negative number, so the squar root of -2 would really be written as i(square root sign)2. (i do not have math symbols on this computer.) the radicand would be the 2.


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    dotsLove from The Mathematiciandots
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    He scribbled on my heart
    little lies
    to make me believe his
    big lies
    And i wanted to feel his soul
    but it was false
    And i wanted to know his truth
    but it was all a lie
    And in his sea of numbers
    he sent me currents of i's
    because his radicands--
    his cells of blood--
    were negative.




    Submitted on 2005-07-28 16:52:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is quite original.
    I can't say I understood this line:
    'his cells of blood'
    negative cells of blood? Is there something I didn't learn in bio? lol

    The math I definitely know...
    The metaphor was cute- can you expand on it some more? The repetition of 'lie' for the third time didn't seem to do anything for me. In fact, it dragged out the poem unnecessarily. We already know he is lying, no need for those two lines.

    Good write! Don't be discouraged by me. Maybe I just couldnt see the whole picture of what you were trying to write. =]

    Keep ya head uppppppp!
    -Farrah
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by babixpeaches | [ Reply to This ]


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