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    dots Submission Name: The Eyes Have Itdots

    Author: Cora Windover
    ASL Info:    1,292/it/Radiant Garden
    Elite Ratio:    4.15 - 862/763/204
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 889
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    Bytes: 536

       mmmmmmmm poetry

    thanks for all your suggestions

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Eyes Have Itdots

    Have you noticed
    How his eyes follow you around the room?
    Maybe waiting, maybe wishing
    Always wanting
    To be closer.
    Have you noticed
    How he looks away?
    As if frightened that you'll wonder
    Why they wander
    To your gaze.
    He blinks, suddenly afraid.
    And you smile as you realize
    That everything you've theorized
    Is coming into play.
    Have you noticed?
    When he smiles
    You return it
    Knowing everything's okay.

    Submitted on 2005-07-28 17:48:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ooh. Nice one. I like this, its all about the eyes, and the eyes are supposed to be the window to the soul. I lvoed it

    | Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]
      Oooh, this is rather enchanting, all about eye movement.

    "The Eyes Have It!" would be my suggestion.

    Nicely portrayed, the reluctance to actually lock eyes with someone in case of rejection,

    I really liked this

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      An short enchanting poem that you keep repeating have you noticed so naturally a person might think that would be the most likely title but whatever reason you don't like it you should find another. I have read this three times and my suggestions would be MAYBE or
    EVERYTHING IS OKAY. `always write poetry, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      i assume this is a boy sees girl across room sort of poem , it was really good and i reaaly enjoyed it , the one thing i would say is , they dont normally notice us unless we dont have a top on or u have a top and play for england lol.
    take care
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]
      Makes me think of an old picture I used to have and the person in the picture had rather big eyes and if you looked at them and moved around the room the eyes would always follow you. I used to scare my sister-in-law to death with that picture. So what are you gonna title this one?
    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]

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