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Natures Way

Author: lainie75
ASL Info:    30/f/uk
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My 4 yr old nephew , has been diagnoised with autism and learning difficulties , my heads in a spin as is my sisters and the whole family , he is a lovely happy little boy , and sad as it is i have been focusing on the but he wont do this and that , instead of on the positives. I love him he is my nephew Daniel the beautiful little boy with the chocolate brown eyes.

Natures Way

Feeling helpless , Unable to aid.

Feeling Anger , unable to fade.

Feeling let down , by natures own touch.

Feeling saddened , like i'd suffered enough.

Feeling terrified , not knowing whats ahead.

Feeling confused , taking in what was said

feeling emotions , from what has gone on.

Feeling love , for my sisters baby son.

feeling hope , for the future we see.

Feeling stronger , for if you need me..

Submitted on 2005-07-28 18:27:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Tears came to my eyes as I read this. I'm going through something similar with my niece and newphew. I understand your pain and helplessness. And I see your need to be the strong one. and I love the way you made Daniel aware you love him regardless through it all forever. With that kind of backing what can't he do? I think this was just beautiful. You took the words out of my mouth.
| Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey Elaine! This is touching! Truly emotional and a very hard thing to deal with. Autism is so difficult a disease as there is so much that remains unknown about it. I have cared for children with autism and it is emotionally challenging for the family. Providing support is the most important thing you can give your sister! Learning about the disease really helps too! You have expressed your feelings just beautifully in the piece. I pray for you and your family and of course you know I am here if you need me or have any medical questions! Best wishes my friend!

| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  Lainie, this is so touching. Your writing spells it out so clearly. I feel for your family. It's very frustrating when you feel like a mere bystander, but just by being there you mean so much.
| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Aphrodite Dream | [ Reply to This ]
  Awesome...yes, autism...know a lot people affected by it...none of them close kin like you but still...I have fetl these feelings like that which you have written. It has got to be the most perplexing disease known to man. The "alzheimers" of the young, ya know? I gave my drumset to a kid with this disease because it was the only thing he "really got into". His mom said they can be very musical so maybe buy him a guitar or something, ya know? Anyway, just my thoughts. I liked the feeling of "angst" and betrayl in this piece...ya cant help from feeling those emotions, ya know? Have a good one and try to smile.
| Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  Elaine, this is just excellent.

The form and wording , poetically, can't be faulted, but the inspiration!

You tell the story so well, and inspire all readers to share in your compassion, and I'm sure karma will reward you with a miracle for your devotion to tis small boy.

Well written indeed.

Be Happy

| Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  Beautiful piece. I used to babysit often for an autistic child.. and though you may at first notice all the things wrong with him... that he isn't like most kids... the truth is... you'll love him even more for the way he is. He will never loose his child like innocence and he will always be loved by you and your family. Like the previous poster said.. he's so blessed to be in your family and not another where they might not care about him as much.
Lots of love
| Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
  That is absolutely beautiful. Gorgeous. I love the repitition. and don't think I am some sick and twisted person by saying this is beautiful. I'm sorry that you all feel upset by the news. But think about it this way. He is a beautiful little boy recieving HUGE amounts of love...what is so sad about that? He doesnt know he has a if he had cancer...then that would be different. He'd be in pain AND know he's got a problem...but it's different. maybe im out of line...and not making any sense...but thats how I'd look at it.
keep on truckin

much love,
| Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm sorry to hear the news about your nephew. Maybe as time goes on you will be able to focus on the positives. His life could be so much different if he was put into the hands of another family, a family that couldn't learn to love him, but you and your family surround him with love and make him happy, I'm sure those chocolate brown eyes shine with love and warmth when your with him. In your poem it starts of as sad and confused then nearing the end it changes to hopeful and loving, very nice job!
| Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by MurphyGirl44 | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm so sorry to hear about this. But all I can say to you is be strong. I'm sure you heard this before...but it is a piece of wisdom and what i think is a definate fact..."There is nothing God will give you that he thinks you cannot handle." I really belive that is the truth. I'm sure you and your family will give him the best life possible.

This was an awesome poem. it really truly was. It is so emotinal. So it goes so well with how you are feeling. I love poems that come straight from the heart. Great job...this is a definate favorite!!!

| Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]

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