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Author:	Blindly-N-Love
ASL Info:	17/F
Elite Ratio:	4.61 - 197/141/29
Words:	113

Class/Type:	Deep Thought/Cutting or Mutilation
Total Views:	237
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	644

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I have to take deep breaths bc Im trying to stay cutting clean. This is just a thought kind of a vent!! Comment Please!! Whether good or bad, It was just a thought!!

* I need to cut * dots

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It takes all my efforts not to cut again,
I just belittle myself, and feel it's a need.

Metaphorically, I use my paper as my arm,
And as my blade, I use this pen.

I release my feelings,
And receive a similar high.

Is it bad I wast to see the blood on my ams?
Or worse, that I try not to, because of the scars.

I want it,
I need it..

I feel like a crack whore not getting any.
I need to do it, I need to cut.

It's sad I have gotten this bad,
But it's an addiction I dont think Ill overcome.

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  well wut can i say ?? i thought that u would create a better atmosphere with ur words:
" I use my paper as my arm,
And as my blade, I use this pen. "
but well.. it could be better organized and adding some words would be better ! in general good idea by comparing those thing
keep writing
and peace and love and ...
listen to good metal not gothik!
| Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it. Its so honest. I know what you mean. Ive "stopped cutting" a thousand times, but I always end up doing it again. You described it well. I like the part:

"Metaphorically, I use my paper as my arm,
And as my blade, I use this pen."

I think you can overcome it. I think I can too, but I just havent figured out how yet. If I come up with anything, I'll let you know
Great job

-nikkki
| Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  I think the comparision between the arms/paper and blade/pen could be stronger than it is. I have nothing else to say. Ok wrute. Please leave me a comment on one of mine. thanks
Reeses
| Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]
  I can relate to this so easily. I am a ex-cutter and i always tried to turn to writing instead of cutting when i was trying to stop. I could never seem to get my thoughts about cutting onto paper. But you explained my feelings almost perfectly. It was an addiction, I know it was, and I know it's easy for it to become one also.

Keep up the good work...

-Miss M.
| Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a great write. *round of applause* I feel the same way all of the time. I have stopped cutting for about 6 months ever since my boyfriend made me stop...but every once in a while I feel that need to relive that pain...because even though I have stopped cutting, and even though I wear a mask to pretend I'm happy, I still want to die...
I'm glad someone feels the same.
Thanks for listening
-Tiff
| Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by punkrockchic629 | [ Reply to This ]
  Raw emotuions are the best medium for good poetry. This poem is very passionate and very honest.

It puts the reader in your shoes for a moment capturing all the tensions and pain.

I am proud that you found a better medium than the alternative.

Keep up the good work.
| Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by Unicrom | [ Reply to This ]
  Merry meet Blindly. It sucks being 15. I am glad you are finding other means of release. Hopefully this will become your full time release. I embody both kinds of addicts you speak of here. I am clean and sober for 8 years now. Unfortunately I just relapsed on my mutilation date. I like the way you spoke of staying clean from cutting. I am so sorry things are like this for you that you feel the need to cut. I will keep you in my thoughts and prayers. If you need to talk, pm me. I will respond the first chance I get. I share the computer with 5 people. Blessed Be Andrea
| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by magickandie | [ Reply to This ]
  I dont know that much about cutting but i do know thisyour piece was very good. i was able to see your raw emotions and see your struggle to overcome your demons. keep up the fight it gets better in time.

Here's wishing you love and peace of mind,
Jermaine.
| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
  this was.. wonderful.. pure.. raw.. full of feeling.. it might be simple but cant simplicity be beautiful? i think it can.. and oh my do i know where you are coming from.. from one former cutter to another i feel your pain.. i know what you are going through.. it is an addiction but you can do it.. i too feel that "the paper is now my arms"and that "my blade i use this pen" keep holding strong you can do it.. if you ever need to talk just pm me on here or talk to me on yahoo.. im kornskandy on there.. good luck
awesome write
~*~amber~*~
| Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]
  cutting is yes a very hard addiction. i am actually fighting it myself. for some nitpicking where it says "Is it bad I wast to see the blood on my ams?" wast? do you mean to say want or waste? also, to help a little bit instead of
"Metaphorically, I use my paper as my arm,
And as my blade, I use this pen."

why not say

The paper is now my arms
And for my blade I use this pen.

because it will already state it is a metaphor.
thats just my opinion. keep yours change it. it is still good. my favorite lines are
"I feel like a crack whore not getting any.
I need to do it, I need to cut."

i guess because my mom's best friend is a crack whore. and srugs are an addiction just like cutting. i truly think you have a talent.

Jessi~
| Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked the comparision between the arms/paper and blade/pen, that worked well. But I didn't like the theme in general, cutting is such a commonplace subject. Fact. And I also see it as an immature thing to do, it just proves one is emotionally weak, as well as insinuating that one is slightly psychotic but never mind. I hope you can write about other things so us teens can lift the stereotypical veil of cutting and mutilation.
Stay clean- as it were.
| Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
  This is such a great poem. It's also great to hear that you are trying not to cut. You had your true emotions in here. If you want to over come it you have to be able to belive in yourself...and say I CAN. That is really the key i think. Great job on this one.

Mikki
x3
| Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]

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