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Heart Once Whole


Author: Malcolm Bishop
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Sat down...came up with this. I know it's short, figured I'd come up with the frame of the piece and play with it later. I'm thinking an acoustic guitar, some drums.


Heart Once Whole



HEART ONCE WHOLE, BROKEN BY THE PARTS YOU
STOLE.

HEART ONCE WHOLE, BROKEN BY THE PARTS YOU
STOLE.

Look'n at this liquor bottle,
used to think us the perfect model,
of love.
Drink'n from this vacation,
used to think us united nations,
of love.
I used to think, I used to think
we were on the brink,
but now I'm screaming into the sink,
I need more booze, don't know what to think.

HEART ONCE WHOLE, BROKEN BY THE PARTS YOU
STOLE

HEART ONCE WHOLE, BROKEN BY THE PARTS YOU
STOLE

In my mind I see you grin,
I'm tear'n up the house look'n for the gin.
Your eyes, your mouth, your nose, your skin,
when the booze leaves the body that's when pain begins,
when pain begins.

HEART ONCE WHOLE, BROKEN BY THE PARTS YOU
STOLE

HEART ONCE WHOLE, BROKEN BY THE PARTS YOU
STOLE

I thought I was enough,
thought I had the stuff,
you said you loved me but it was all just a bluff.

HEART ONCE WHOLE, BROKEN BY THE PARTS YOU
STOLE

Now your name I will never spit,
I'm left a Picasso heart,
and a mind with a bottle under each armpit.




Submitted on 2005-07-29 04:16:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  That was GREAT ^_^ i really liked the way you expressed the emotions of sorrow with a hint of anger because,lets face it,when a similar situation comes up,this is how we generally feel...great job!
| Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by Fallen One | [ Reply to This ]
  I like how you make this a kind of drunken rant...because of the subject matter I think that fit really well.

I used to think, I used to think

This was awesome...I like that idea...like I use to believe there were actually thoughts there...so what's left my friend...if there are indeed no thoughts.

Awesome write and you seem pretty talented.

Peace
~Jaz~
| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmm, I didn't know you wrote lyrics. This is quite interesting. Relatable to a lot of us here I'm sure. Just wanting to drown out the thought of someone, yet our mind refuses.

You have a "real" way of expressing the reality of a broken heart. The pain and sadness...the emptiness.

That last part was quite an image.

A good write.

Take care,
~Sandra
| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Dude, nice one...i particularly liked these lines:

"Now your name I will never spit,
I'm left a Picasso heart,
and a mind with a bottle under each armpit"

I'm sure a lot of people can relate to your poem.
A lot of us have been left "screaming into the sink." I like it, it's very very realistic.

have you put this to music? would be interesting to listen to it. Anyhow, great write.
| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Mud | [ Reply to This ]
  Interesting. I usually don't like it when someone writes lyrics, because I never know what type of music I'm looking at.

I really think you told a story of lonelyness beautifully with this. It ends kind of abruptly for me, but that's just me.

It's very sad but the feelings blend very easily. I think you did a great job writing this, as lyrics can never be easy. Nice one.
| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked the way you expressed yourself.. its really intersting...

it also sounds like a song..yeah i agree with Mud there...lol.. i would like to hear this on the radio some day

and i also liked the anger part of this poem...nice write

kay
| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]


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