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    dots Submission Name: White Lustdots
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    Author: AfricanPrincess
    ASL Info:    21/F/SA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 222/201/31
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 952
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 467



    Description:
       Damn, this guy infront of me in class looked soooo damn hot in this white tshirt . . .instead of listening to the lecture my mind was going insane with sexual thoughts!!!!

    Just sumting short . ..


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    dotsWhite Lustdots
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    Baby you look so sexy in your white
    I long to be layed down so we can start to play fight
    Press me tight to the bed
    and tie my hands behind my head
    Tear my shirt from the top
    Remove my bra, licking my breasts don't stop!
    Use your nails and start scratching my skin
    directing pulsating shivers from within

    Be rough baby don't go slow!
    I want to feel the pain as you fill me up from below




    Submitted on 2005-07-29 08:25:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your writing is very sexual and I like your train of thought! Theres all kinds of poetry in the world and yours just makes the heart go BOOM BOOM!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha, you go girl! I can so picture this scene in a Zane novel. I was able to totally relate, hence why I wrote Lecture Hall (which is on my page). Anyway, to be more specific, I love teh last two lines:

    Be rough baby don't go slow!
    I want to feel the pain as you fill me up from below

    That should be written on a Valentine's Day card somewhere. Also, I want to thank you for your comments on my poem, "Manifesto Secret." My bf really enjoyed the poem even though I was afraid of him reading it. Keep writing, I enjoy reading your words.

    Lee Minsu
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Lee Minsu | [ Reply to This ]
      Passion can create a world of pleasure or a world of hurt, depending on how desparately you chase the source of your divine spark. Problem is, you may mean nothing to each other after the passion is gone. That's the tragedy of hitting overdrive below the waist when you're still in park above the neck.
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn! I got on a white tee shirt! What's up? Let me groove inside your slot while I play with your props...LOL I know you a freak! To be thinking about some [censored] like that in class! Yeah! That's some [censored] I'd be doing...That's why I couldn't pass Geometry...Oh well...In the words of Young Jeezy...

    He can make love to ya
    I'ma beat it up

    X
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      Darn...this is some crazy piece...I loved the LUST...that it invoked in me...So so SEDUCTIVE...its so damn yummy...I liked the flow...its so ENTICING...really...YUM YUM...I liked this real much!Nobantu
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]


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