Heads of yellow lion's teeth
are crouching on the lawn.
Their color summons children.
Will the children pluck the tops away
for necklaces or bitter tea,
or will their father's push mower chop off the heads,
and make him think that the beast is dead?
But this is just a pipe dream,
for the beast shall never die,
for ten grow in the place
of every one you chop away.
ha ha ha I love the chopping down the dandelion heads to grow ten more that is so cool. i read this work and i get memories of when i was younger blowing that little plant with the white seeds on it (im not good with plant names, do forgive me)and watching the seeds float away. that was a magical time in my life. thanks for the lovely read, mike
Love this imagery. Like the way you used "lion" to not say dandelion but rather present it to me.
Are crouching on the lawn
Crouching flowers now theres an image... I couldnt see flowers crouching but see how it relates to lions!
Their color summons children Will the children pluck the tops away? For necklaces or bitter tea Or will their father's push mower chop off the heads? And make him think that the beast is dead But this is just a pipe dream For the beast shall never die For ten grow in the place Of every one you chop away
I feel this part of the pice could be improved in that I feel metering was lost a bit.
Or will their father's push mower chop off the heads? This line was difficult to read and doesnt seem quite right.
I think you should change the title back to "The Lawn Monster"... sounds more descriptive and interesting. It's like GRR! =^..^= I like this poem, and I always return to it, because it could be taken literally, or you could attribute a thousand metaphors to it... when you do a poetry book, put this one in. I think I'm replaced my "fave cuddledumplin poem" (I only usually have 1 per author) with this one... i dunno, it's just so striking.
I liked this too,-- funny how we can draw inspiration from the commonest things. I also wrote a poem about Dandies last summer...think I'll reread it now to stave off this winter chill for a few. Thank you
I'm afraid it's more of the second. I let my imagination get away with me one day. I originally called this "The Lawn Monster." It blows my mind how much time some people spend trying to kill them; I like the little buggers myself.