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    dots Submission Name: Simple Pleasuresdots
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    Author: lmz
    ASL Info:    40/female/USA
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 3433/1529/84
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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       mmm...things that make you feel good!


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    dotsSimple Pleasuresdots
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    A song that always makes you sing
    The sweet smell of lilacs in the spring
    Watching the sunrise on a clear summer day
    A phone call of friendly words to say
    Listening to waves crash on the beach
    A smiling child with arms in reach
    Moonlight strolls in the park
    Scented candles to brighten the dark
    A hummingbird hovering at a flower
    Realizing you can sleep another hour
    A soothing back rub when muscles are sore
    Your team has the winning score
    Steaming hot showers when winter is cold
    A nice gesture done for someone who's old
    Romantic dinners with lights dimly lit
    and most of all.....chocolate!




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      It is the simple pleasures that make life worth living...
    now, I know I have heard that somewhere before, I just can't remember where.
    I really liked this, I think the title is perfect and I love the M&M picture on here.
    Alas...I have found another to add to my favorites list!
    DJ
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      I Loved It!!!!! The simple things that gives us pleasure. You hit the nail on the head, so to speak...This will definitely go along with my favs.
    I really like these lines;
    Romantic dinner with lights dimly lit
    and most of all............Chocolate!

    Smiles,
    ~Linda
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Lorna,
    Well you know where this one is most definately go'n don't ya? That's right! On my favorites list! You see there are a lot of pats about this poem that I really like such as the "back rub" now that's a real good idea if you ask me. Then there's the steaming hot shower, there is a great idea for when the muscles are sore too. And most of all a "Nice gester for someone that's old" now you must have really had me in mind with that one!
    And as for the chocolate, well I get my chocolate fix most every day even though I don't think I'm supposed to be eating it. But what do you do? How do you control a true chocolate freak like me? This was an enjoyable read and made me hungry...

    !doc'
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this! going on my favs... Those are all things that we all take for granted, and when someone can make you stop and think for a moment about the grand perspective of what life is about, it is nothing short of aewsome. Good job

    IK
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
      Simple pleasures;
    GOOD MORN'N-GOOD MORN'N, YOU'VE SLEPT THE WHOLE NIGHT THROUGH...Good morn'n to you.
    Wake up and toss out those dead roses, grab some coffee, the paper and sit awhile on the easy chair. THE SUN has arisen!
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      Joy, happiness and self-indulgence - what an awesome threesome. You rhyme was perfectly balanced - well nearly, and the theme was just uplifting and as all can see, it lifted everyone's spirits who commented.

    If that was your objective Lorna, then you succeeded out of sight. Your versitility is very admirable and your range of writing is very good indeed.

    I do admire your writing.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhhh... chocolate. You know I read this enire enticing piece and all I remember now is chocolate... maybe im missing my boyfriend !

    Anyhoo, I did adore this poem. We all need to indulge in the simple pleasures every now and then whether they might be embracing our children or eating an entire pint of chunky monkey (one of my favorites)!

    Life is too short to sweat the small stuff... lets all just eat some chocolate!

    Very cute and refreshing,
    Ella
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]
      I see you like the green ones, and the blue ones are my pick. I noticed you just about covered the simple pleasures list, but have you thought of sitting under a tree freezing your butt of holding an ice cold deer rifle as the winds blows across your neck taking all the warmth left from your body! Deer season is fast approaching here in the Penn State and I'll be there waiting for sunset to come so I can get warm again. I sounds harsh, but its my passion.
    I bet your an animal lover who hates hunters?
    I hope not, but that will not change my desire to read your work, for you are a very good writer.
    | Posted on 2005-11-20 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      This is excellent Lorna
    You wrote about a lot of the things that make you so strong
    You definately look at the positive of every situation something I strive to do every day

    Great Write
    Ron

    And as always Reading your thoughtful comments bring me happiness
    Thank You Lorna
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so cute, and I definitely agree with the last line! Some of the couplets could be slightly altered so that the rhyming lines have the same number of syllables, but that's not a big problem.
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by kyml | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Imz

    Just a collection of simple pleasures ;0) It could go on and on.. Nice little piece ;0) I just enjoyed it ;0) Keep writing ;0)

    KNS
    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by KNS | [ Reply to This ]
      Hahahhaaa! Ahhh, what a "sweet" ending! I'm still chuckling over here. Women and chocolate! It should be something they teach us about in psychology classes. They should do a study, or something.

    You know it's perfectly valid this kind of rhyming scheme, though I much prefer internal and complex cadences, there's something to be said for the imposed order of end-of-line rimes. You accomplish these rhythms with skill and aplomb, and with a lighthearted skittering that transcends the banality of what I'd call a "typical and obvious" scheme.

    This was a joy to read.
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Vancrown | [ Reply to This ]
      lol you're definately right these are simple pleasures but none the less they are pleasures and the most satisfying of all I might add. the line "A phone call of friendly words to say" seemed al little incomplete because the next line didn't exactly fit as something to say on a friendly spontanious phone call (I know noone said it was spontanious) "listening to the waves crashing on the beach". Good, no, great write. (I love chocolate and massages)

    Later,
    Doe
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by dead,yetalive | [ Reply to This ]
      lol...mmmmmm chocolate! :)

    This to me was a very cute poem. It was upbeat and thoughtful and there was something for everyone. The ryhming to me really made it work. Good job!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this falls under the domain of all things we can relate to. Giving, receiving, love, helping, all of these ring true in our hearts and make us feel tantalized by what is being offered here. You've mentioned many ideas here and each one take us on a splendid trip. Thanks for sharing, and great job too.
    peace and love,
    nansofast
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Lorna, a woman after my own heart! Those are indeed some of my favorite things in life...especially the chocolate! lol. I love the poem if not for it's simpleness itself. It evoked joy out of me as I pictured each thing you mentioned as a joy. I smiled each time. You wrote this so well. I love it. You did it again!
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      haha! what i wouldnt give for all of those things right now, specially that chocolate... anyways this is great, just reminds you of why we all keep going. and this was just all wrapped up in a cool little rhyme. great job again
    -steph
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by playcrackthesky | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really sweet. I agree with them all! I think that the last line had to be my favorite!!! But sunrises, backrubs, phone calls, and sleeping are also totally awesome! Anyway, this was so cute, I loved it!
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      i love candles in the dark watching shadows bounce around and seeing the flame dance its very nice. moonlit walk ohh yes very very calming by the beach is the best so there two lines there :). seeing the silvery moon on the horizon is one of the best sights. nice piece brings a smile to my face. :) mike
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      lots of great things to choose from! i can certainly relate to the chocolate, particularly milky chocolate... yummm .
    this is uplifting and cheery. thanks!
    @ Cat
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      These are all "Some of my favorite things" as well. Very nicely done! I especially liked;

    Realizing you can sleep another hour
    And of course "Chocolate" Love it!

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      your making me drool. lol...unlike other people who attempt this, it flows well and the subject doesnt get off...and almost everyone is bound to like the things you described! lol...the descriptive words were very nice, but it wasnt that original. not that that matters because i have some very ununique poems too :D lol...really good

    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Nirvana | [ Reply to This ]
      mmmm...chocolate...mmmm...
    Yessiree, this was a very happy write. It was like after reading every line..."Yup...Yup...aint that the truth...yup...yup..." Then...mmmm...chocolate...mmmm...

    Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      It's so nice to see a happy poem! I will admit it, I usually write depressing poems...that's when I feel the most creative. I liked how everything seemed to flow together, great rhyming as well. Maybe try to be a little more personal-explain how it relates to you a little more if that makes any sense at all? :) keep writing
    annabelle
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by annabella041986 | [ Reply to This ]
      awwww i love this! If only everyone could always embrace and welcome the simple pleasures in life... but so many people are too busy to even notice them these days. This was great.. the rhyming was good and the ending made me smile... mmm chocolate! :D Keep on writing things like this. You have a great talent for creating visuals of happy moments. :)
    Brooke
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      A wonderful Day Brightener that's what this is Makes me smile and smile.

    So many enjoyable pleasures... and isn't it usually the simple ones that gives us the most pleasure?

    I like the entire list and the way you made it all flow together. These two lines below were sweetly stated as well...

    "A smiling child with arms in reach"
    "A nice gesture done for someone who's old"

    Just great stuff here. Makes me sit back and think what simple pleasures I can come up with...

    *A hot towel from the dryer
    when you step out of the shower. *

    Okay, I'll stop..but I can just see myself the rest of the day trying to come up with more. I'm crazy that way...lol.

    Loved it!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is great. It contains all the things that make you calm. Reading this made me feel very relaxed. This was a great little piece. Great job!
    - -Caitlin
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]
      hello Lorna ,

    great job it has something for everyone , and it has chocolate in so it has to be lovely , pleased to see your happier work , i hope its because things are better.

    take care
    Lainie x
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this. I though the rhythm was a little shaky at times but overall good. iI loved the begining, "A song that makes you sing"... All these things bring happiness and it's true. These things bring smiles and relaxation to yourself. Also, these things are real, there not things that only happen in an imaginary world... I like that about it. Its not just something you thought about its something you have or can experience. Great job I look forward to reading more of your work.
    ~manda~
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by manderz_1207 | [ Reply to This ]
      lol. I loved the last line. definitely some of life's finer things. "The best things in life are free;" truer words have never been spoken. I liked the list and how you made it rhyme. All-in-all though, my favorite line is:

    Realizing you can sleep another hour

    It feels so good being able to go back to bed after hitting the alarm (a few times). Great write.
    J
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by bentnotbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      I dont know why, but I really like this - it flows really well - the rhyme is not over-done, and hell you mentioned CHOCOLATE how could it not speak to me...
    One line I really liked, "A smiling child with arms in reach" - good way of describing - it was very visual for me
    Great write
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      If I ever need a YES, I always buy Chocolate- yes the good stuff works every time. I really liked this and I wished to thank you for reading The First Time, and your comments. I appreciate your time, shall we stop by each other more often?
    Toot-a-loo
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      Lorna, dear, thank you for sharing these favorite things of yours. Have you noticed that when it comes about time for our menses we crave chocolate? I am not exactly sure why this happens, but I guess this is just as good a reason as any other to eat chocolates. Everything, including chocolates, creates sweet memories.
    Appears to me that you touched on each of our five senses with eloquence. The child reaching out to you, wanting you to hold close, was especially charming.
    Each verse created an outstanding image allowing me to understand how you were feeling when you wrote this poem.
    Personally, I like couplets in poetry, because anyone not familiar with poetry will always recognize the ending rhymes. I enjoy knowing that my poems using couplets, just as yours did, makes a person, new to poetry, become interested in the great world of artful poetry.
    God bless,
    Yvonne
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by dycrain | [ Reply to This ]


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