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    dots Submission Name: Haikudots
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    Author: CleoCollier
    ASL Info:    40/F/South
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 83/84/26
    Words: 8
    Class/Type: Haiku/Serious
    Total Views: 956
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 86



    Description:
       Written while on the road in Tennessee can u guess what we were looking at?


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    dotsHaikudots
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    Textured tree-flesh breathes
    silent granite underbones
    slumbering dragon




    Submitted on 2005-07-29 16:10:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My guess would be a mountain, but I could be wrong. I think that because of the location, "tree-flesh," and "granite underbones." This is a nice haiku. I'm sorry that I don't have anything constructive to say, Amy
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      Heh, heh, heh...I can make a guess, but it probably wouldnt be the right one. haikus (bless u) are so cool, very descriptive, yet lets the mind wander...and in my current state of mind, I wonder about things in a tripped out way. I will just say that this was very sensual and can go in many different directions. Jeez, haikus (bless u) are grrrrrrrrrrrr8! Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this Haiku, but it's the other one that I think really has the essence of a true'haiku" in it. Saying so much in such a limited way. To me this is the safer more schooled haiku. I believe it deals with the genesis of Earth and makes a nice reference to the sleeping dragon, a widely regarded myth held by the chinese culture concerning the origins of earth, and therefore a nod to the original authors of Haiku. Good write, but I still, as I said, love the other one.
    Ashley
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by queendepricate | [ Reply to This ]


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