Description: I am sorta doing a series of poems...I have four in all, it starts with the initial broken heart. That's what this one is about...I am going to follow it up with the emotions and stages I guess you could call it of leaving a broken heart behind. So tell me what you think, I was hoping to find people who could relate to this or maybe show someone that is hurt right now that there is hope...even beyong the numbeness. So yea, tell me how you react. Thanks.
Part 1- Yesterday's Pain -------------------------------------------
She woke up with yesterdfays pain
wounds frashly opened
heart freshly raped
she cried for the first time again
in her head she could recall everything,
sitting in his room
her tears strumming his guitar
she pretended that he was in her arms
but he refused to hold her
and she slept
and she dreamed of yesterdays broken heart
she woke up crying tonight
tears that fell from yesterday
crying for the first time again
She woke up with yesterdays pain
wounds freshly opened
heart freshly raped
i love this line /Why? not knowing...yet /. but still love it ../. the first stanza is g reat opener to the poem as a whole peice../. it really keeps things together ../. i love it ... JWI thank you for the compliments and putting "blue Star" on your fav' list im gladd you like the poem ../. i love your work as well ..
super! i like the intro/conculsion for this one. It had away of pulling you in and made you want to know more right away and kind of let you off wanting more. I like how you used the word "freshly" it was a very good adj to use... my fav line was
I'm glad you said it was a series of poems or I would've had a lot of questions. Some misspellings in the first stanza. I've been heart-broken for about a month now. I thought my love had left me, but he came back for me today so I thought I'd tell me fellow poets...lol. I hope your story ends up like mine. I look forward to reading the other poems.