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Perfume strangled city whore

Author: caspian
ASL Info:    23/m/Denmark
Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 134 /189 /57
Words: 68
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Perfume strangled city whore

A lost fog floats by
causes skin to creep inside
leaves the airholes
sore but dry
Red dress
No particular details
slim fingers
stitchy smile
and a fragile glint of hope in eyes

I guess Im not the only one here
looking for an excuse
to elude my presence from this sick truth

A grey stones slides by
lipstick storm
perfume strangled city whore

Submitted on 2004-04-13 04:32:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this needs no description,i got it ,for me .
the fog -air holes-love a stichy smile in platforms my self.
was she a street walker or some stalkers girl?
dont really matter though cause words like this make beautifull music here in new york on the lower east side.where many a love story like this did arise,in the past that is ,and now such passion amongest the norms are considered creepy ,or a crime
imagine such passion going to waste that only the homely would look at you with such a lost and longing look .
more on the subject it was to short (for my ideal satire)
| Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by paulie d | [ Reply to This ]

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