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    dots Submission Name: Undergrounddots

    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2778/1297/258
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Another erotic poem about the passion I feel toward my wife.

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    Your gypsy hands
    beneath my shirt
    melt away tommorrow
    melt away the hurt
    make the waste places
    wet with life
    slithering with softness
    just beneath
    our eyes

    Let the sun
    the sea
    the waves
    carry me
    gently, gently

    Submitted on 2005-07-29 20:14:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is wonderful... I love the aste places wet with...

    Very sensual. You must be very in love... beautiful...

    Indigo Kid
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]

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