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    dots Submission Name: Hell Awaits Medots
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    Author: t0_eazy
    ASL Info:    26/M/Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 118/123/41
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       Yes, I know I'm psychotic...tell me so. lol


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    dotsHell Awaits Medots
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    Oh, how ashamed I am.
    Why must I feel this way.
    Iíve given up on everything,
    Iíve lost the will to pray.

    Feeling so lost,
    With no way to return.
    Iím going to Hell.
    Iím going to burnÖ

    I left out of the Church,
    Havenít entered since.
    Open the ground for me,
    Iím coming Dark Prince.

    Save a spot for me.
    My own eternal cage.
    Iíll fill it with hate.
    Release all my rage.

    Iíll take my last breath,
    Give you my soul.
    Then lie in my bed,
    Of hot burning coal..




    Submitted on 2005-07-29 21:55:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not a big believer of hell for my own reasons. You did a great job although I must ask if this line "I left out of the Church" is suppose to be written this way. As I read your piece I kept returning to this line. Did you mean "Since I was left out of the church"? Or since "I left their church". The wording in this line just seems a little confusing. Otherwise I liked it.
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by smiling death | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems this poem was borne out of a morbid desire to burn in hell, arising out of both a lack of faith and a loss of hope. I went through a phase where I wrote stuff like this as well. I can't exactly call this a good poem.
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by Roberto Santos | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked the ..left out of church ..part we talk that way down here hehehhe it may be dark but i can understand that a good writer can right on every emotion every topic not just how YOU feel i am that way too i can write on suicide haveing never done it good work i liked it
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      That wasn't gloomy AT ALL. Sheesh, why did you write this? Whatever. If darkness is what you want, have it. If darkness is what you want to write about, write it. Because as far as I can see-you're pretty good at that.

    {Kate}
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]


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