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    dots Submission Name: The beauty I createdots
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    Author: MurphyGirl44
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 70/76/25
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsThe beauty I createdots
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    Under the night sky I twist and turn my body, swirling and dancing to the beat of my own heart
    I look up into a blanket of black and see tiny sparks of fire, they softly fall to the ground like sweltering snow...
    My bare feet move gracefully in the tall grass as the fire beside me soars higher, becoming the beast it is, but it does not seek to harm me, but to protect me from spirits that are unwelcome, that only wish to destroy the beauty I myself have created...
    The air is thick with the smell of rich spices, exotic scents from a foreign place, I breathe in deeply, for it is intoxicating
    I stretch my arm back and pluck a branch off a pine tree, I toss it into the fire , hearing the pop and crackles
    I dance until my limbs are sore, and whisper to myself "I do not need love anymore"
    Onto a warm blanket I crawl, Until I am swept away by a wave known as "Sleep"...




    Submitted on 2005-07-30 01:02:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very different from most things I read on this site. I love the way you described your world. And being as sleepy as I am right now, the way you kept the blanket throughout the whole thing. Security I assume.
    I dance until my limbs are sore, and whisper to myself "I do not need love anymore"
    This really sticks with me. As if you are beating it out of yourself..or into yourself I should say, that you don't need love. I know the feeling

    Lots of Love
    Jane
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by Jane Lost | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a nice write. I liked the feeling and the descriptions were very good. But you gotta love at least yourself otherwise it makes it hard for a person to continue to create their beauty. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an interesting poem. Creating a world of your own where love is no longer needed. At times I wish that too as well. The imagery you paint with your words is vivid. I can picture you dancing before the fire. And the contrast between the comfort of the blanlets which you mention and the destructive power of the fire makes for a very interesting read. It sounds like a very safe world to retreat to.
    Bill
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by rankamateur | [ Reply to This ]
      This made for sweet reading. I could see myself in front of a bon fire dancing and to I'm tired and so feeled with joy. I rest and drift off to sleep. This was very good. You know how to use imagery.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]



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