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    dots Submission Name: Herald To The Reaper pt.1dots

    Author: Abort_Chaotic
    ASL Info:    19 almost 20
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 201/172/50
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       Ok, I could't get this out. I don't know. Hmm, it's kind've bad so yeah.. : Not one of my best works. I don't feel too much energy of any kind coming from it. Please comment.

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    dotsHerald To The Reaper pt.1dots

    Crawling from the depths on the forsaken soil,
    witnessing this radiance coiling in her eyes.
    This empy shell,
    easier said a hollow heart.

    Distractcing from his true skill,
    for the one who lives to kill.
    From his dusk robe to his lustrous instrument.
    This dead poet seeks to lament.
    Former chronicles of the deceased,
    for his poetry of lives creased.
    Blood characterizing his own tale.
    Bound to her, he feels he shan't fail.

    Submitted on 2005-07-30 04:02:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well it seems well written and I like your word choices, but no matter how many times I read it I can't seem to get much meaning out of it. I guess I just like to come away from a poem with a clear understanding of it. But It was a good read. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by bgj | [ Reply to This ]
      VERY Imaginative & graphic! Love your picture though! I like how it starts raw and short directly to the point good job for the entertainment part, keep up the good work peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      descriptive and very detailed.

    This dead poet seeks to lament.
    Former chronicles of the deceased,
    for his poetry of lives creased.

    this part seems to be the most interesting to me. it just seemed so simple yet powerful.

    trying to figure out where your title comes into your words. but i think this is only the beginning since you stated 'pt. 1'?
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by poeticblindness | [ Reply to This ]

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