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    dots Submission Name: TODAY OR WHENdots
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    Author: kellz
    ASL Info:    25/F/England
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 122/148/49
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 342
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 941



    Description:
       what do most people feel when they see their first love after a break up and remember the way it was with that person?


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    dotsTODAY OR WHENdots
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    Today I woke up with a hurting heart, but it wasn't from medical problems. It was from a
    forgotten love of my past that painfully reentered my dreams.

    During these dreams, I felt as if I were reborn. I felt the feeling of love again without a worry in
    the world. It was he who made me happy, it was he who opened my heart and committed
    murder to all my pain. However, this murder wasn't total death. The pain came back and it came back to stay.


    Now it's infected and peroxide doesn't even foam..........so maybe I'm not normal? I'll probably
    never see him again in this life unless he continues to peacefully visit my dreams.

    If he does, maybe one day I can stay, stay with him in another world, stay with him in another
    time, stay with him by not waking up..........at least my heart will never hurt again!





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    ||| Comments |||
      wow, full of emotion, you can reall ysee the pain you feel or felt, i love the analogy w/ the peroxcide i thoguht that was great, that has to be my favorite line from this poem, absolutely wonderful!
    | Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an excellent metaphorical piece. I love the murder of pain, and the no foam peroxide, its brilliant. I think we all feel this way, one time or another, some more often. Very good, this was wonderfully written.
    | Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]



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