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    dots Submission Name: Catostrophedots
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    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 609
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 845



    Description:
       LOL JUST FELT LIKE RAMBLING AND BEING STUPID, NOTHING MORE, NOTHING LESS, BUT DONT THINK THAT THIS IS UNLIVED WORDS, EVERYTHING THAT COMES FROM ME IS TRUTH WHETHER ITS IN A PLAYING MOOD OR NOT, JUST A NICER WAY OF SAYING IT


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    dotsCatostrophedots
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    Caught up in catostrophe
    "oh dear god, somebodys bashing me"
    What kinda dumbass worries bout that
    Wanna go hard, B im bout dat
    In my 4x4, fuck a cadillac
    these threads are like somebodys lifeline
    so im gonna stop fucking with these people
    before i mess up and stop time
    Dont wanna crack jaws
    I just wanna break laws
    And proudly say that im hated
    by everybody on elite that acts shady
    Dsyde criticised?
    Thats when these lyrical murders
    get publicised
    Stop cussing! Fuck you, Stop Fussing!
    saying i cant express without being crude
    My lyrics take these kids higher
    than their mamas ludes
    You dont like my piece?
    Like i care, Heres a piece
    Fuck you,you,you, and oh yeah you too
    Peace




    Submitted on 2005-07-30 17:58:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lol, u crazy [censored]a. Dsyde lives in you. i'm tired as all hell so this is what you get. my job rules but my feet hate it. later~P
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      fuk everybody huh? i agree with hannah. that [censored] was kinda funny but i can tell u meant every word and like i said before. if u shouldn't give a [censored] about the negative opinions of
    others. they just be hating
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. And you know, I think that using profanity in a poem makes it seem more real. I think it's a good way to express yourself. Anyway, the whole message and everything behind this is really good, and I like the way you said it. I have a few favorite lines, and since I have nothing but time, I'll point them all out.

    "In my 4x4, [censored] a cadillac"
    I thought that was funny. I'd be in a 4x4 too. Just like you said, f* the cadillac.

    "Dont wanna crack jaws
    I just wanna break laws"
    Yup... lol you and I both.

    "Stop cussing! [censored] you, Stop Fussing!"
    I like that. I thought the rhyming was cool too.

    Two very enthusiastic thumbs up. Great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      This made me laugh. I think you got your point across nicely(other than the [censored]s dropped here and there, lol). Anyway, I liked it. Maybe I'm just weird. Ttyl. Hannah
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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