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    dots Submission Name: Rescue Medots
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    Author: MurphyGirl44
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 70/76/25
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    Sitting alone in an empty house, thinking silently to myself, Was that a tap against my window? Was that a voice outside my door? I move slowly in and out of rooms, turning on all lights
    I need to see whats hidden in every corner, nothing will be hidden in shadow...
    I lock all doors and peer outside the window, my heart racing, fearing I will see a face on the other side of that window, or a dark figure standing on the porch
    Relief washes over me and I turn away from the window, looking back into the house, watching for any movement out of the corner of my eye, I see nothing, I hear nothing
    I sit down in a chair, nervous about having my back towards a window
    Am I paranoid? Maybe
    Am I sane? Only slightly
    I am scared of the initial shock and horror that will pass through my body if what I see...If what I see ... are the same images trapped inside my head, trapped inside my dreams
    Please someone come rescue me from the fear I myself have made
    Make the hours seem like minutes so that sunlight will stream through the darkness and lighten my gloomy thoughts ... Rescue me




    Submitted on 2005-07-31 01:25:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is wonderful. I know you have heard of me before, well know you know my username, so if you want check my page out one day. Stacie
    | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by beachgurl05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ohh, i get the same feeling sometimes!! My brothers used to terrify me at night, they'd put this creepy white mask outside my window and laugh all horribly...I got SO scared! I still have freaky dreams and shivery feelings. I don't think you ever get rid of them.

    You might want to think about your use of the word Windows, I noticed it was used a lot, perhaps you could say "Glass" at some point, rather than window, and make it less repetitive.

    And what helps me in times like this is drawing the curtains, turning on the lights and loud music and just, dancing the fears away.

    ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      To me it brings to mind a panic attack. And the helpless feeling one has in the midst of one that there will never be any relief from it. Not even from sleep (and escape via sleep was something your creation poem yesterday touched on). And having no other course of action left the subject finally turns outside herself for help. It's that turning for help which is this story's redemtion. I like your writng. I really got wrapped up in reading this poem. Thanks.
    Bill
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by rankamateur | [ Reply to This ]
      I can totaly remember sitting at my parents house, them gone for the night, in Alaska, alone, not a neighor for miles, and thinking "Someone is out there..." because I heard a branch snap or something. It is frightening. This captured that so much that I relived what I used to feel over ten years ago like it was yesterday. Good write, my friend!

    Indigo Kid
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
      You have a away of drawing the reader in with simple things with your words. I liked this alot. I can't believe it's just random thoughts. I get the sense that you don't like being alone when I read this. I have been there. This was good.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]



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