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    dots Submission Name: :.:gone without a trace.:.:dots
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    Author: bluesoxz
    ASL Info:    16fohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 71/101/38
    Words: 338
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dots:.:gone without a trace.:.:dots
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    So head strong but I
    Still hear what you
    Say.Cought up in the
    obstacles of life but
    I put on a face like
    Everything is fine.

    So far away and I cant
    quit reach you yet.
    Shh the voices are now
    Starting to settle in.
    Ease the pain one more
    time So my body does
    not become immued to
    The fact that there is still
    Something left to feel.

    The knife you put in me has
    Yet to reach the surface of
    my heart.The words you say
    Dig deep.The shit you talk
    Has been cut into shreds.
    ill make it through somehow.

    I will find a perfect place to hide.
    Headstrong
    Stubborn
    Foolish
    These things are me.
    Im to fucked to be called a humanbeing.

    The book of life has closed
    on me and I have disappeared
    Without a trace.
    A blur
    A noise to the earth
    Gone with out a trace
    Headstrong.

    The coldness within me is
    braking and I cant live
    Without a phobia of dying.
    My presence seeps into
    The earth leaving only
    Dust.
    Then reality starts to settle
    in and I find out I cant make
    Myself numb no more.
    Gone without a Trace..
    Headstrong..

    No clues are left that Im
    Still alive...So please
    Assume im dead for that's
    What I feel inside.
    My body Was left at the
    murder scenes battered
    And beaten you cant tell
    Its me.

    Gone without a Trace this
    isn't me.So headstrong I
    Cant believe this is true.
    My childhood so damage
    My feelings so upside down..
    No name
    No fingerprints
    Never existed
    Gone without a trace.
    Headstrong.





    Submitted on 2005-07-31 19:25:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    1: >_<
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    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I was like "wow" as I read this. You filled this poem with pain and despair. It seem like you were was even dead to yourself at some parts of the poem. You seem like you made yourself stop feeling and that is what made you feel lost and empty. This was a deep poem you wrote. And it was highly emotional. I liked it.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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