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    dots Submission Name: FUEL FOR MY FUNdots
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    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 783
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1368



    Description:
       people tell me to quit getting so angry about things, when im not angry at all. i wrote a piece having fun just spitting some words, and people get really really mad, lol and they tell me to calm down, tis tis tis.. even go as far as playing some childish games on my page, thats sad, but i WANNA ASK THIS
    HOW CAN I STOP WHEN IM GIVING
    SO MANY OPPORTUNITIES
    TO KEEP GOING
    THAT DONT MAKE NO SENSE
    so i guess we just have to see what happens lol


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    dotsFUEL FOR MY FUNdots
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    It's what drives the men behind the pens
    To continue doing this shit
    without any amends
    Who gives a shit about a critique?
    I'm bout to make this site gone,
    A fucking antique
    A fire burns inside
    There aint nobody left alive
    Im on a lyrics high
    Fresh outta pills, fresh outta drink
    But these 3 am rants
    make haters think
    What if he did go big?
    I'm gonna be talked about
    at all his gigs??
    I would like to thank you all
    for the shit you feed me
    Without im nothing,
    nobody would ever believe me
    or my rhyme, cause without something
    to fuel me
    I'm just another fool with talent
    lost in time
    Certain people talk about grammar
    Well I'm here to testify about the slammer
    Juvie hall back in the day
    It was swing hard or
    watch what you say
    You all know I got a big mouth
    so i never shut up
    That's why these hands are scarred
    cause I learned to buck up
    And feed off the fuel given to me
    Cause the rage and fire
    will always live in me!!!!!

    NO MATTER WHO BEGS TO DIFFER
    CAUSE I LISTEN TO NOBODY
    IF YOU DOUBT THEN OPEN
    YOUR FUCKING MOUTH
    YOU'LL FIND OUT WHAT IM ABOUT




    Submitted on 2005-07-31 19:29:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is great. Everything you write leaves me practically speechless. I like the title a lot too. And though I like the whole thing, my favorite parts are:

    "Juvie hall back in the day
    It was swing hard or
    watch what you say"

    and

    "And feed off the fuel given to me
    Cause the rage and fire
    will always live in me!"

    They are awesome lines. I have nothing but compliments for this. Have an excellent day As always, great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      ngenoius prodigy looked like he had fun commenting on this one. yea i read this already cuz it's ur journal. good job cade. ur like the angriest person on this site. that's cool though. tell these kids that u are not 2 be [censored]ed with.

    troy
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      As always kid, you get your message across loud and clear. Always good to see you standing up for and shouting out to the world what you believe. Til next time. Hannah
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      "Certain people talk about grammar
    Well I'm here to testify about the slammer
    Juvie hall back in the day
    It was swing hard or
    watch what you say
    You all know I got a big mouth
    so i never shut up
    That's why these hands are scarred
    cause I learned to buck up
    And feed off the fuel given to me
    Cause the rage and fire
    will always live in me!"
    Great Lines !
    As always your talent amazes me...
    I'm ready to buy the CD, and the second one, and the third...hope your voice is as good as your pen - no critique intended :)
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]


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