Description: New guy in my life, had to write about him and how he makes me feel. :)
Flutter of the Bouncing Hearts -------------------------------------------
Bouncing hearts collide
Going back and forth in my brain
They only show themselves
When I think of you
(Which is constantly
And hardly an exaggeration)
They twist and turn
Flip-flop and cartwheel
And make my heart flutter
They are in shades
Of pink and yellow
Amethyst purple
A few emerald green
And striking red ruby
But my favorites
Are the hearts
That share the color of your eyes
So bright and perfect
A blue so clear
That I can almost see through it
Like the ice of a glacier
Symbolizing you
So strong and powerful
The hearts speak your name
They whisper
Let me know
You will always take care of me
Will always hold me close to you
So that our hearts can join together
And the flutter
Of the bouncing hearts
Will never stop
very descriptive. i know how you feel. i have a new girl in my life who is very special to me. i like your poem. i've always liked your work. i've been away for awhile, but i'll be back on a lot more now. keep it up. i always enjoy reading your stuff.
This was like soda. Effervescent and sweet, nearly verging on saccharine but stopping jst short. The excitement of a new relationship often sets people to thinking in vibrant colors. It's quite the experience.
I found the glacier metaphor to be a little cheezy but I wont hold it against you. It is a love poem so there has to be the token "his eyes are so dreamy/he's so strong and handsome" reference.
Overall a light, "bouncy" piece that accomplishes what it set out to.
Amethyst purple A few emerald green And striking red ruby But my favorites Are the hearts
enjoyed the descriptive words of the diffrent gems, and i always enjoy a little new love piece, its such raw emotion when love finds somebody that its hard to say anything about it rather than just enjoy reading it no matter the format or the flow good write
Submission Name: Flutter of the Bouncing Hearts
