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    dots Submission Name: Art and Reflectionsdots
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    Author: LadyChaos
    ASL Info:    19/F/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 718/606/95
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I thought that if i wrote something that id feel better. Meh, its pretty transparant. Give it some thoughts


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    dotsArt and Reflectionsdots
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    Unlike a Monet painting,
    If you step back and try to see it all
    It still makes no sense.
    The dots, the squiggles and lines
    Are uncomprehensibly confusing

    Like a broken mirror,
    No matter what angle you hold it at
    The reflection will always be fragmented
    Distorted, completely unrealistic.

    Abstract paintings and broken mirrors,
    Esoteric, yet still, says everything that needs to be said,
    About me.




    Submitted on 2005-07-31 23:13:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the word esoteric. There was another punctuation error though, the word distorted was spelled distored. I especially liked the second stanza with the mirror simile.

    Also, I was wondering. Is this the way you see yourself too?
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Aaron Felix | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem. You need to fix one typo in the third line of the second paragraph... the word should be 'will' and it says 'ill'. Otherwise, this is a good write.
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by black_beauty18 | [ Reply to This ]


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