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    dots Submission Name: July 27, 2005dots
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    Author: ibelikeso
    ASL Info:    21/m/FL
    Elite Ratio:    5.19 - 117/96/20
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 364
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       this is a series of events in my life that i have put into words...


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    dotsJuly 27, 2005dots
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    the words ink into my mind.... tainted from their sorrow filled sounds.
    the ink that flows from that solid mind and leaks as tears to the ground.

    that is all i can feel, as my chest holds in air real tight.
    my hands firmly cover my heart, and ambitious i continue to fight.

    the girl across with a deceitfull smile, takes me in to her arms.
    I feel the comfort of such love, although its but a charm.

    in her mind shes thinking "help me, please!", "i cant continue this life."
    but in an innocent way, what she really asked is... "will you take care of me as your wife?"

    then theres a boy, unlike the man, that noone has shown him love.
    He is passed around from hand to hand, just like an old filthy glove.

    so the boy grows bitter and he grows old, wanting to be more than me.
    but all he does is caos and wrong, and thats all that is left to see.

    to proud to ask for help, even to admit that he is wrong.
    the boy continues to live a lie, ignoring that he is all alone.

    once more theres a woman that spills ink to my ears as it is sorrow filled lonely words. i wish i could cry with all of my heart.... " you are the only one for me LORD!!!"




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      yo dat was sweeeeeeeeet.i like the ryhms. the end part is cool.


    "once more theres a woman that spills ink to my ears as it is sorrow filled lonely words. i wish i could cry with all of my heart.... " you are the only one for me LORD!!!" "


    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting, I could shower you with all the 'Oh, how beautifully bittersweet' crap, but I don't think that’s what you need to hear, well, a series of events in your life? That’s more then interesting, you have an intriguing way of writing, this is...I don't really know because its yours, and only you can really interpret it, but I enjoyed it, I like the way you did the whole sorrow filled voices entering the ear...I guess now I should tell you that you have talent and well done or something. Hmm, shame, I won't. But it’s really good.
    - Illusion
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Illusion | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel like i have picked up someones photo album while walking down the street and am looking at the photos while walking somewhere that i can hand it in... to see if i will be reclaimed only not all the pictures are there... some of them are missing and so it is hard to get the full knowledge of the person... one only gets half a story if that...

    each two line thought represents a different photo... a different glimpse at a moment in time that has stuck with you and while it is brief and fleeting it is real and powerful too...

    the way you create ppl in this... especially yourself... is really well done considering the few words you have used... the sorrows, the interactions, the broken dreams and crippling fears... the need for love...

    you are so sensitive (in a good way) and that comes through in your write... in your sefl analysis and attempt to write through and make sense of life experiences that have bought you to where and who you are now...

    this was really interesting... i wanna know more... wanna find the rest of the photos... who knows...
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]



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