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    dots Submission Name: Goldfingerdots
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    Author: playcrackthesky
    ASL Info:    21/f/IA
    Elite Ratio:    4.46 - 463/457/88
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       well first off goldfinger is a great james bond movie and you all need to go watch it if you havent seen it. now to my description i had just watched that movie and was thinking hey that would make a cool poem so here ya go. if it confused you i'm sorry, i'll try to explain it. anyways enjoy.


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    They say you have the Midas touch
    How far does this extend?
    Gold at an instant,
    Then passion is a given right?

    You met me in my room
    With a tray of room service,
    Quite convenient you two are…
    Now about that gold.

    You are rash and strong
    Taking my arms and head,
    Well I would never see it coming
    But there it was in all its glory.

    Gold.

    Everywhere it stood
    Weighing down its holder,
    Just begging to be touched
    And that you did.

    Except now things were feeling cold
    Something itching my skin to stretch,
    Like lightning igniting my veins
    There I stood as your prize.

    Just another for your collection I suppose
    I stood there solid gold,
    Peering out of glazed over eyes
    Thinking, greed is a bitch.




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      This was neat and very well written. I have met a few people that have that thing...everything they seem to touch becomes gold...BOOM! Ya know? I never watched the movie (not a 007 fan), but I liked what you said and am familiar enough with the flick to see how it can relate to it. Nicely done. And yeah, I also know a few people that are allergic to gold too. Strange? Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Your right that is a nice poem. And Goldfinger is a wicked movie! I like how you end it, since greed is a [censored]. It's not confusing at all (I think) Someone's got the Midas touch, touchs you and you become gold...Or, it could be that someone very charming came, and turned you into another trophy girl. Many different ways to take this poem, I like it, good job.
    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah Steph this is great , i really liked that its yr greed thats the [censored] , i have seen the movie , isnt where she dies cause her skin needs to breath or summit or maybe i'm totaly wrong which is quite often and very normal lol.
    anyway great job
    take care
    Lainie x
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a greaat movie, and a greaat poem. I thought the ending was pretty interesting. You could swing the meaning of it a couple ways, I think. I wouldn't change anything.
    Great job
    *Melissa
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by frozenconscienc | [ Reply to This ]
      Suffering the same fate as everything Midas touched can truly be drag. Nice understated medtation on getting everything possible in a relationship and still being miserable. Gold is what you are, not what you have. Very nice satire.
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, Steph, me likey!

    VERY different, I really like the way you've structured this, with the moral imbedded. I'm trying to think of her name...Tiffany?

    You put just the right amount of eroticism to show the greed for gold/whatever as an avid beast, as sex is sometimes.

    I repeat, me likey!

    be Happy

    Graeme

    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Suffering the same fate as everything Midas touched can truly be a drag. Nice understated meditation on getting everything possible in a relationship and still being miserable. Gold is what you are, not what you have. Very nice satire.
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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