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    dots Submission Name: Momdots

    Author: closebutremote
    ASL Info:    22/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 54/77/16
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Im just so fed up with my mom's alcoholism. That I needed to write something about it.

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    You know just what to say,
    To ruin my day,
    you open your wounds,
    just let them heal,
    so this hate, this anger you will no longer feel.

    So I can fall asleep tonight, or die,
    because you kill me,
    you know you do,
    you kill me well,
    and you like it too, I can tell.

    Submitted on 2005-08-01 09:50:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's sad when our parents or loved ones are so lost in their own sea of pain they can't reach out and embrace those who love/need them most. Now that you're an adult, even though it's still painful you don't have to be a party to that - some people are unwilling or fearful to change and it only becomes more and more frustrating until you decide to not make it your problem. It's hard, especially with family, I know but sometimes you just have to disconnect. Good, powerful write! Love,Peace,Joy! epiphany ; )
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      having an alcoholic parent is never good (yea i know obvious statement there). i have hreard stories from friends who tell me what its like and sometimes im surprised they made it through that. what you wrote about seems to me exactly what an alcoholic does. so yea to me u said it all. good job!

    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this...my mother isn't an alcoholic, but we don't get along at all...even though I've tried. I've written my own poem about her..You did a good job with this piece, Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by t0_eazy | [ Reply to This ]
      You should turn this into a song, it would greatly help others with acoholic mothers and even fathers. You put your soul into it which is first and foremost, It could be a bit longer, but you say much with little.
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      my mom is an alcoholic too, she wont ever in a million years admit it but she is. she's very neglectful too.. my poem about mom is Nothing if ya wanna check it out.. i really like urs
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]
    I think this is beautiful, and I know what you mean....mom is not the best and she says so much that is hateful and I'm so sorry that it is part of our lives. I want you to keep writing I know that in this life it has been what helps me deal with it all.
    I love you keep writing you know that you have a great talent.
    Denise the sista
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]

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