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    dots Submission Name: All Ties Indots

    Author: slntfirflm
    ASL Info:    26/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    5.76 - 301/331/93
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       i took all the titles to each of my poems except this one and put it into a poem... kind of kool eh? took me about an hour almost two to get it the way i liked it... the words in italics are my titles i might have missed one or two but will find out and fix it.

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    dotsAll Ties Indots

    Take That graceful Ending Bow
    For the night just Kiss away tomorrow and smile
    Deal with the Unseen Truth while still Invisible
    Listen to the dead call by standing in the looking glass
    Can you feel it grow in the simple techno beat of yesterday
    you feel hidden beneath surfaces that turn you inside out
    the horizons fade into nothingness
    the taunts linger on your door step 'i am an addict'
    ever since my vodka stumble and they gave up on me
    simple faded touch of misery with the evil eye
    sunk below the dew depths of the days
    of what truly lies beneath me
    wondering hesitant thoughts of would i be able to feel my own blood
    wipe away the bloody glass off the mirror
    'can you even notice' i remember asking
    yet the meaning meant nothing to you
    i feel the maggots pick my flesh clean
    because i dont forget i never have
    i look into the sky hearing that soaring message 'love wasn't enough'
    sink under those blissful bushes once again
    just one more time i wish to awake a new
    without wondering what will become of me...

    Submitted on 2005-08-01 09:54:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i dont see blanket in there..
    But this is a cool poem, even if we didnt know it was all your poems titles in there..

    | Posted on 2006-05-29 00:00:00 | by shanu | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that's amazing. Not only did you tie in all of your titles, but they all made a wonderful piece. I think your style is very elegant. I really don't have much to say. However, I applaud you and your efforts with this poem. Those two hours were certainly not wasted! ~SirensSong~
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by SirensSong | [ Reply to This ]

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