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    dots Submission Name: "Melody of Angst"dots
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    Author: Martin S. Allen
    ASL Info:    33 male
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 671/237/43
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       This is just a poem about the experience of being a teen and feeling misunderstood by adults. Also about the bands of our generation who were a voice for us in a way.


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    dots"Melody of Angst"dots
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    Many have not known the truth
    Choking on the fumes of youth
    Pushed back and persecuted
    Against the wall we stood
    Endless halls of trepidation
    Prophets on the radio stations
    The melody of angst
    Through chords and distortion
    The words became a fist
    When we could take no action
    Alone in our rooms
    With shades pulled tight
    We were one with the music
    That played through the night
    It called us to battle
    In these four walls and concert halls
    Through stereos in cars
    Heard underneath the stars
    We'd run away in melodies sang
    A battle cry as feedback rang
    A smashed guitar our sacrifice
    An anthem of youth and rebellian
    In these four walls and concert halls
    Reveal the broken truth





    Submitted on 2005-08-01 13:08:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem is pretty timeless...

    i could imagine someone in his room, listening to rap...getting the message to fight back...or fighting back silently...knowing there is hope, there is change...he is saddled by adult authority, by all that is going on around him...and he is discouraged, hurt...he identifies with the music...his life feels broken like the guitar..but the smashed guitar can also symbolize his breaking out of the life he hates...

    but timeless is this poem..because i am from the sixties and can relate..

    i used sit in my dorm room in college and listen to dylan, judy collins, simon and garfunkel...steppenwolf's Monster...and imagine...and then we did protest, and fight back...with the music in us..guiding us...

    music has been such a part of me growing up and now...i grew up with rock...and all its changes..

    this poem brings me back to many times...when i was 6, 16, 21. etc etc etc...and later in life listening to the same songs and feeling that feeling again...

    thanks for this piece...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this poem, has an interesting ring, it makes sense to.... i liked it, you are a very good poet.
    maddie
    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by BarleyBreathing | [ Reply to This ]
      words and music.. words and music.. music is a joyous thing.. makes one feel and become in some senses... i feel that music is the key to my soul.. this poem is soooo true for me.. and many i'm sure.. you are very good... i enjoy you
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by Justmenow14 | [ Reply to This ]
      I adore the way you start the poem "Many have not known the truth" as it draws you in. And ending the poem with "Reveal the broken truth" which draws the curtains of your poem to a close. Brilliant poem!
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by sweetsamurai | [ Reply to This ]
      This seemed very lyrical ~ aside from being about music and the power of it. I really liked the quick, in your face format and thought it worked well for this piece.
    Seems like it would make a good song!
    Love,Peace,Joy! epiphany ; )
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the quick pace and short lines.
    still making it deep though.
    your discriptions were really well done.

    'We'd run away in melodies sang
    A battle cry as feedback rang
    A smashed guitar our sacrifice
    An anthem of youth and rebellian
    In these four walls and concert halls
    Reveal the broken truth'

    i loved this part. the end was perfect.
    the whole story was really great. making you wonder.
    drawing you in.
    i like this alot. you did a great job on it. the emotions.. wording.. etc..
    i wouldnt change a thing.-
    jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      To tell you the truth It really didn't keep my attention, at first it did and then I just got lost like I was reading something forced and it didn't capture me like some of your other poems.
    I just read it again and actually get it I do like it but had to read it twice I guess... It is a really good poem actually and it does seem like it would push more towards the lyrical side, I liked the whole thing and really dont have a favorite line and it was great,
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by ceestyl | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i liked this a lot. The title drew me in, and I wasn't disappointed. I know exactly how that is since I guess I am going through that stage in my life right now. Good job. :B
    LeAnna
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      it seemed like more of a song than a poem. that's just my opinion. it could pass 4 a rap, and the power of music is a tool 2 be used by the musician and when it's used right the results are endless.
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good if I don't say so myself, oh I just did say so! lol! I don't like the title of my own poem, I need to change it! lol!
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      I have always felt that music has such a large affect on people. It seems that, like a strong wind, it can carry away your emotions. You seem to have thought the same way, for you have captured the work of music and expressed it in your poetry.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      Very true words spoken here in this poem. I often feel like I'm one with the music when I have it blasting my eardrum to death. lol. I love the way in your poem, you realized the fact that music is a voice to so many people when they feel speechless themselves. Great job.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi, just little old me. tom

    Many have not known the truth
    Choking on their flames of youth
    they Pushed back and persecuted
    Against the walls where they stand
    Endless halls of their trepidations
    Prophets of radio stations blare
    The melody of Augustus Caesar
    Through chords mean distortions
    The words became a fist, a sword
    When they could take no action
    Alone in their rooms, celled
    With shades pulled tight
    they are one with the music
    That plays throughout the night
    It called to them in battle fields
    the four walls and concert halls
    Through broadcast waves in cans
    Heard here underneath the stars
    they run away to melodies play
    A battle cry as a feedback rang
    A smashed guitar their sacrifice
    An anthem of youth and rebellion
    In these four walls and concert halls
    Revealed by the broken truth, my love.
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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