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Author:	acommoncold
ASL Info:	19/M/California
Elite Ratio:	4.98 - 77/87/22
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Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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Description:
This poem is dedicated to all the poets out there who share their poetry through open mic sessions. Or to any poet who finds their work slammed by other elitists.

This poem was written when my dad wanted me to go to see a flamingo dance (( Spanish Dancing )) and I wanted to go read my poetry at the Barnes and Noble open mic sessions. Because its one of the few things I have to go to. I don't ask much of my parents and this was the case since no one told me about the "Flamingo Dance" which I was not interested in.

So my dad said " Well if you want to miss this once in a life time event to go listen to bad poetry then go ahead ". Yeah there we go. That is why I don't take you elitist slamming my poems to lightly.

LEARN TO RESPECT!!! But like I say, the people on Elite don't know how. As everyone wants to live in a world pretending they are the best poets in the world. Trust me when I say my poetry sucks. I've read and listened to real poets and I am nothing compared to them. But at least when they talk about my poems they tell me kindly and nicely.

Thats the difference between real poets and you elitist.

Enjoy.

We Amateur Poets dots

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We’re not the best to breathe poetry
Except, for maybe a few of you

But we are forms, new poetry
We are the, Amateur Poets

Sure we aren’t the best, and our poems aren’t riddled with
Unknown metaphors, that requires years to decode

And that might be good, because that’s why
Many people find poetry, boring and hard to grasp

Because what some poets doesn’t realize, how simple can be great
Since our emotions are to be full blown in your face

And good Amateur Poets will cause that to happen, through words
Maybe even through errors, it becomes tangible

And we are willing to show it to the world
We Amateur Poets, who don’t have perfect poetry

Most of us will fade out as times past, and never be remembered
But I don’t care, because I’m living now and I want to hear poetry

That might have a few mistakes here and there
Because we are humans, we aren’t perfect

But most of all, we Amateur Poets are Bound
To change someone’s life, even if only our own.

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  you said alot in your write, with short phrases, but meaningfull, your right when you say we are amatuer poets, alowd to make mistakes, I know i make plenty in my own work, and through the 2 years ive been here ive been able to make my poetry better because of the comments of the people here, no matter how much i was bashed or how harsh the words i received they made me think my peices over, and then in turn make them better...im in the process reposting my poems for more comments..i take them, and use them because i am an amateur poet.
| Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by fallenone | [ Reply to This ]
  Thank you for posting such a raw, straight-forward piece. I love the fact that you write in plain english- no big words that need two dictionaries to decipher. No analogies that go off into never never land.

As a mediocre poet on Elite Skills I find it insane that certain people feel the need to slam work they feel isn't 'perfect'. Some of my favorite poetry has been penned by the innocent hands of children! And, while I don't write the best stuff on the planet, I do expect a bit of respect from those reading and taking the time to comment. (I'm rambling- good pieces of writing do that to me!)

Thanks for sharing this piece with us!

Take Care!
-Chell-
P.S. In line one: breath should be breathe...
| Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
  this attracted my attention for one obvious reason (amateur being my eliteskills name). i really appreciate the message this peice sends. i've never been horribly criticized here but ive noticed a few comments that i thought were more harsh and discouraging than they were helpful. i apologize for myself or for anyone else who may have commented on your work in that way.
(lines 8-10) i completely agree that errors can be useful in poetry. i had a hard time living up to the commenting standard when i first started visiting eliteskills (and i still do, just not as hard a time as before) because of that, (along w/ other reasons that have nothing to do with the current topic). it frustrated me because i wanted to point out every poem's stregth, while silently appreciating the human flaws in them. take, for example, flow: while sometimes, if it's a little off, it can be distracting, its offness (for lack of better term and love of making up new ones) can be appreciated as an expression of the poet's exact feelings. (hmm, maybe i should add that lil tidbit when commenting on someone else's flow).
all in all, i really liked what this piece says to me
sincerely
-~Mal
| Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by amateur | [ Reply to This ]
  Bravo! i love this the whole message in it. i dont know what i am but i do know one thing im very amatuer at commenting. i wish we had a course on how to comment properly cause i need to take it. thanks for this. i like your messsages in your poems and your journals. sincerely and respectfully, mike :) p.s. if i ever made you offended by my comment poke me in the eye!!!
| Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
  I like to start of with saying that your description and poem was straight-forward...and so I like that...the message is well-read among anyone...with that said...I also want to say that you must understand that AMatuer of not...poets will get smashed...it all depends on the reader...respect...I for one, have respect for you to write this knowing full well that there may be few poets who will get the best of this and, of course, give you the worse comments possible (but that's expected, right)...
What more can I say, but in the end we are all amateurs, including the best of the poets...for we are all learning how to better our experience...
take care...and doesn't matter if they, out there, don't like your work, it's only you that shold be satisfied with it..
-stacey-
| Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by idlewriter | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm too shy to read at Open Mics... hehe. But that's beside the point.

I think I've read enough of your work to say with confidence that I like your personality. It's banging. lol

As for this piece- liked the way you left us hanging at the end of the word poetry:

'But I don’t care, because I’m living now and I want to hear poetry / That might have a few mistakes here and there / Because we are humans, we aren’t perfect'

You must be the most outspoken amateur poet around here. x]

-F
| Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by babixpeaches | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh thank God, finally someone else! I cannot stand poetry that uses metaphors every other line and words that require a dictionary to understand, leaving you so lost and befuddled, you can't simply enjoy the write.
This is great. I'm one of those rank amateur's that don't use form, meter or rules when writing. Sometimes it rythmes, sometimes it doesn't. I just write what I feel, think, or what the muses tell me to. I will never be anywhere near Poe or Frost, but that's okay with me. I'm just having fun. Great write,
Traci :)
| Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
  yes!finally someone says it. I applaud you fellow writer. To me I think there is no perfect poet...just damn good ones near to perfect. This I like, we are all amateur poets-I can deal with that. So what if our poems are not a Keats, Poe, Dickenson, or Spencer. So what if we can't write like the romantics and contemporary authors. The only thing that matters is that we have the words to write. Structure doesn't matter-lord knows the famous poets follow a format. We are freestyle writers. Anyways, thanks for sharing.

Later Days
Tracey
| Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by fiery_eyes | [ Reply to This ]
  The title of this piece caught my attention because I, like many others here am an amatuer poet. But by no means are my emotions and dreams amatuer. And that there is the key.

This piece was filled with so much emotion, and that is all thats needed for good poetry. I have been critisized on the way my stuff flows, but hey, it is the way it comes out. I write the way I feel. And you have done the same thing in this piece. There were no big words here, no hidden metaphores to decipher, and that is great. Yes it is nice to read something that takes thought to understand, but most of the time a person just wants to read something they can relate to. Something that will make them feel. And that is amatuer poetry.

I don't think that I have commented on anything of your before and I know how it feels when someone bashes something you have written, and feel so strong about. After all, this place is a place for us to learn, and we are all learning. I really liked this piece, it was so raw and so open. Full of emotion. That is what poetry is.

We are our own biggest critiques, and if we feel our stuff is perfect, then it is. We write for ourselves. Its expression of mind and soul, and that is something that should never be judged.

Thank you for writing this piece. It lets us know that no matter what we write or how we write it, we are still poets. And that will never change as long as we keep writing.

Brightest Blessings,
Crystal
| Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by lenotoire | [ Reply to This ]

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