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    dots Submission Name: Connecteddots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 740
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 412



    Description:
       Love,Peace,Joy!!!


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    dotsConnecteddots
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    I like "IT"
    when <@>
    can feel your
    smile in the
    Day

    When you know
    what I'm thinking
    & I what you
    Say

    The cool
    of the river
    is just your touch
    away

    Your spirit
    is calling
    Let us Go
    Play

    What tomorrow?
    I'm Now
    Today!




    Submitted on 2005-08-01 15:41:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked this, it took me awhile to get the eye part but I did kinda feel dumb for not seeing it maybe I was too close to the screen. Nice poem and simple very desrciptive also
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by ceestyl | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...this was good...you kept it simple but it had a lot of meaning and I thought the rhythm flowed quite well..I'm concerned about who you wrote it for..oh well...Good Job
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by t0_eazy | [ Reply to This ]
      Tif, this was just lovely, short, sweet yet pithy. I love the formatting and that made the rhyme more subtle.

    What tomorrow?
    I'm Now
    Today!

    This was nice!! Good write!!

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]


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