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    dots Submission Name: Surrealistdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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       Love,Peace,Joy!!!


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    dotsSurrealistdots
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    In Chaos
    is
    Beauty

    Surrealist
    color me
    the death
    of melting sunset

    Feathered winged
    existence

    Paint me the color
    Now

    Show me the
    picture within

    Where we're going
    not where we've been




    Submitted on 2005-08-01 15:44:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this one and am going to add it to my fav's it is a really happy poem and thats what I got out of it. Look forward never back and thats what I like about it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by ceestyl | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely...yet another awesome poem...I liked the title of this poem...the last stanza was my favorite...I really like your writing style...

    Very good job on your poetry friend...

    ...jessie...
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      This was so serene. I liked it so much. Your flow was peaceful like the poem it self. And you imagery was like a topical to the mind. You write such happy poems. Keep them coming.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Now why did this image of birds in the sunset come into my mind as I read this?
    I think this was nice
    because of that picture you painted for me....even if it wasn't meant to be that.

    In Chaos
    is
    Beauty


    It is my personal opinion that you can not have beauty in this world without chaos.

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes you write the most wonderful things in such few words. This is most inspiring and uplifting. Chaos is Beauty <- at times, that is so true!
    Hmmm, "the death of melting sunset".. don't think I've ever read it like that. Nice!
    And always look ahead and never back..I like that too.
    Sweet write Tiff Most enjoyable.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      what a beautiful sentiment, focus not on what has been, be in the now and walk your path to the future... i think of a phoenix rising out of its ashes when i read this. out of the depths comes hope for a new day dawning. just what i needed to read today, thanks for that!
    @ Cat
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This is quite nice. I like: "Surrealist/ color me
    the death/of melting sunset." I've always thought that the sunset sky looked like a bunch of melted candle wax, so that feels like you extracted it from my mind.

    Paint me the color
    Now

    Show me the
    picture within

    Where we're going
    not where we've been

    I'm not generally keen on rhyme, but this is well-done. I like the idea of being painted a color and being shown the "picture within." I guess it makes me think that there's a painting even in a field of one color. I have synesthesia, so I see these little differences in color in solid colors, so it sounds like that. The only criticism I have is that I might say colors because sunset skies are so brilliant. The last line is an excellent ending to this. Great job, Amy
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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