Whoa, I think you just wrote from the point for view from the woman of my dreams. I swear some days, passion gives way to reason. As for the poem it is, well great. I loved every word and it will definately make it into my favorites. Keep it up, there is a poetry group called punany, I am not sure of the spelling, I they write and recite what you wrote for a living, I think you got them all beat. Later days Doll.
Here I go... Dear mother of Jesus my virgin eyes have just seen the light... I don't know if it was the right light... But I seen it... I dig this poem... it is very straight to the point without giving a care of what anyone else thinks... which makes it great by just showing that... sometimes one has to go ahead and let their animal instincts take over... It is life for God sakes... and we sure as hell ain't perfect so why not enjoy these little "flaws" we have... Way to give someone a woody lol
Although it was a very vivid poem, I find it to be quite entertaining. Just because the poem is about sex, does not mean that it's a bad poem. Like Chrystal said, there are no boundaries to poetry. Although I cannot relate to it, I find it to be a very true poem because there are many people out there that are like that. I disagree with the person who said that it was written by a sex craved woman. Just because you write a poem about sex does not mean that is all you think about. A lot of my poems are about things that I myself would never do in my entire lifetime. I just find it something good tow rite about at the time. I found it to be a very good poem, no matter what other people say.
Keep it up, and don't let other peoples words faulter you.
This is a very vivid poem, but somehow, I don't like the images it creates in my mind. Although well written, it seems like it would be a little less out of place on a porn site. The images you created were very distracting, perhaps a bit too vivid. I interepreted it as coming from a sex hungry femalewho seems to think of nothing else. I don't really think there is any way to improve other than to be a little less coarse with your description. Overall a good "Female Power" poem if that's what you were aiming for.
You made me think of last night with my bf...and tonight hehe. Damn girl, this was very intense. I was like finally someone who don't sugarcoat sex! I liked this alot. The flow was good. And the directness of your words made the whore effect real. Great job.
i like the picture that goes with the post.. hmm i guess we all have a bit of that in us.. it is great to be withsomeone that you can bring out all the diffrent sides of yourself with, the angle, the whore, the mothering side and ,, you know what I mean.
OMG!!! I see honesty !!...No fluffy romance crap when its not needed....Some of the best moments are those primal ones...where your head hasnt got a chance to tell you that you are doing something wrong ....This is awesome.... and just a little bit hot *fans self*
Hells Yeah! And I thought I was the only one. This is hot, this is sexy, this is raw, and this is incredibly empowering! A must for my favorites list. This poem should be my f*cking anthem. God, I'm in this situation. He's got a girlfriend for the sweet, romantic sh*t. If he really wants to get down and dirty, he comes to me. Cause he knows I'll take anything and everything he's got, love it, and scream for more. There's no satisfying me. Now why on earth would a man want to leave something like that? This is a f*cking awesome poem!
sex is a lovely [censored]er ain't it. It is very vividly seen in my mind everything that went on. Honestly everyone knows mean want sex, you just told everyone what kind is perefered which is good. Hopefully every woman reads this and figures it out. I want a love in my life but damn if she wants just to be my whore i can live with that. Very explicit and well written also i loved every 3 hours of it haha. Sex is a beautiful thing but leave it to us to make it dirty. Thanks for writing i'm looking foward to reading a whole lot more. Val
oh yeah! i love this so much! i completely know this feeling...damn girl, you wrote this well...a fav of mine for sure! i love how you capture the fu**ing aspect without the Love feelings...cuz' contrary to men's beliefs we too, can just f**k and leave...we don't always want love in it, we just need someone to call up on lonely night and have some fun...well wrote!
yur right very explicit but i found it good...reminding me of many things...i liuke the way you said everything blantantly and straight out while many ppl beat around the actual poiont of their wroks and I admire the way everything you had in this peice flowed-martinimadelvr
HA! Ya know, only you would have the balls to post something like this. This I am sorry...well no I am not sorry...this just exudes friggin total self confidence, ya know? A statement that most of us would shy away from. A feeling we all feel, male or female...
Friggin tough arse write and hell yeah! Line up all ya bast-ahds, all she speaks is the truth...that we all feel yet are too cowardly to admit. High five T! Have a good one and keep smilin'
Well you certainly have a range, don't you! This was, er, hmm a little different than the last piece I read of yours... let's see oh! yea! "Conversation with you know who". Well I guess there's more than one way to find Heaven :)
This was F u*king hot! I Almost... And these are new shorts too damn it!
Got another one in ya Babe??? LOL
This was really well done the rhyming was natural and you had me there sweating with you. "Wham Bam, Thank you Mam!" :)
like i said a long time ago "you bold ass chica, you!"
i love that you're not afraid to post what you want. makes me think of "sex and the city" kind of. it's like... i don't know, i guess wanting to have sex like men do pretty much (just for the hell of it, no love, no romance involved). i agree with shrinks, you do have quite a range because just a few days ago you were writing about god and now you're ready to jump back on the horse... damn, bad sex pun... lol, loved it. ...bb...
i loved this poem. the end i can deffinitely relate to : "There is no need for whispered Words of love behind my door I donít need promises of forever"- I dont think sex is all sacred wit doves and a orchestra in the back. all slo, and retarded in my opinion. i think sex should be private, but fun, something to look back, and say "it was fun, but wtf was i thinking? o well, NO REGRETS! felt good ass hell..." again, great poem- i feel ya emotion girl. keep doin ya thang,cuz u doin it well, jade
wait wait wait...i seem to remember the last poem of yours, too...oh well...whatever gets the job done, lol. i have to agree with lonewolf. if sex is really like that, i wanna be a virgin forev...oh forget it, i know what happens to liars. the only part that worried me is "your hands firmly grasp my neck...im not really into the whole sadism/masochism thing. whatever knocks your rocks.
Browndelight this is a fantastically decriptive honest self-expression write. You rhymed and reason without force. Appreciate your decription of "explicit" for this is not a read for the young, inexperienced or judgmental. `always write poetry, Cheryl.
ewww nahh lol this was quite nice... i thought it was gonna be worse than the this from the description.it wasnt to bad, i loved the licking lips/staring at thighs part that was good. i also enjoyed the frame of mind that was used. almost made me feel like i was fixing to get uhhhumm lol but anyways good job again
First things first, the title is quite catching! The dirty was good throughout... not too cheaply worded, still poetic-ish lol, etc. and the last stanze was amazing! " There is no need for whispered Words of love behind my door I donít need promises of forever I only want to be your whore." Its honest, and I like that. No need to pretend to care, right?
Explicit & steamy - don't care what anyone says, every now and again you just need to get down and dirty and f**k! Well written, it moved very easy (no pun intended) Your description was incredible - had to turn the fan up a few notches... Lisa
Is it hot in here or is it just me. Damn, you know how to get right to the point huh "There is no need for whispered Words of love behind my door I donít need promises of forever I only want to be your whore."
I liked the flow very natural very easy, haha. You're quite the naughty girl and i must say kuddos to you. Great write loved it.
WOW! I loved this piece! Getting right down to the nitty-gritty. Standing ovation for you! This was totally hot and not what I had expected, definately not disappointed. It would be so boring if we only made love all the time and never got rough and tumble! Great job I am thoroughly impressed! Candi
Perhaps a bit of fantasy, but then who doesnt fantasize? I actually enjoyed this read. Though I must confess I dont usually read or comment on explicit poetry. I did not though, find this offensive. I thought it was well written, and the tight (pun) rhyme fit it quite well. All in all, good job, T. Carol
Wow. This was amazing! Not just the descriptive words you used, or the highly erotic picture you've painted, but the self-confidence, the blatant sexuality and even a good dose of smug charm just make this piece great. A very dear friend of mine once said ' there is a time to make love, then there's the time to f.uck'. This piece exemplifies that. Traci :)
...cough...cough...girl this is plain ass rocking! probably love it so much bcoz its how many chic (including me) feel but just havent got da balls to say it out loud. Males hav da tendency to judge thinking lotsa chics like it slow and sensual wen in actual fact many are dying to be grabbed& thrown down and being treated roughly with no sweet talk just plain ass nasty dirrrrrty talk. . . ooh must just let you know which lines gripped ma core: "Roughly you grab at me Your teeth ravaging my breasts Pinning down my legs Your hands firmly grasp my neck."
Oh, YES! Any girl -scratch that - WOMAN should be so lucky to be that in touch with sex, sexuality, and how she likes it. Honest, fun, the rhythm builds & definitely suits the theme. I love poems that show such a healthy, macho struttin around side of a female. It's out there boys, & Brownsdelight is one up cause she knows where it's at!
you know sometimes men dont even realize that we have this side to us....but *bites lip* every now and then....we do want only pure, hot, steamy, sweaty, rough, wild, crazy sex.....and you captured that amazingly!
i knew if anyone had it in them to post something like THIS you would.....thats what im talking about!
eh em...uh...*gulp*...hey...that was, um...*dabs sweat from forehead*...that was really, uh, good...yeah...i gotta go to the bathroom...nobody disturb me for 5 - 10 minutes...
holy crap! that was awesome! i usually don't like that kinda stuff, just not my taste (heh heh heh), but this was amazing, seriously! yeah, very well done, and very very very freakin sexy. oh, and don't apologize for that big picture...i love it too ;)
oh, one thing, you might get rid of the punctuation in this piece. it only shows up some of the time and i think you'll be fine without it. k, that's all...GOOOOD MORNING!