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    dots Submission Name: Death Explaineddots

    Author: t0_eazy
    ASL Info:    26/M/Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 118/123/41
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsDeath Explaineddots

    Death comes in anguish.
    Lurking in aphotic shadows,
    Seeking tormented souls.
    Awaiting itís prey.

    At the precise moment,
    It approaches.
    Consuming your life,
    Leaving an empty shell behind.

    It shows no pity,
    Nor remorse.
    You try to cry out,
    Yet hear no sound.

    Swallowed by the darkness,
    Causing your insanity.
    For all you can do,
    Is lie in wait.

    When at last,
    The shadows dissipate.
    Surrounded by warmth,
    You see His face.

    No more fear, no more pain.
    You take His hand.
    Bathing in the radiant glow,
    As he leads you Home.

    Submitted on 2005-08-01 16:11:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked where this piece ended up ~ I wonder if it is like that at first - you just don't know what the heck is going on & then...the light and your spiritual reward.
    Great job!
    Love,Peace,Joy! tif ; )
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this too. You had a great flow throughout the poem. And I liked your imagery. I think you made the thought of dying a little less scary with this poem. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      yee haawww thats my cowboy good work this was a bit deeper then some of your other posts and i like that it shows you are growing as a writer it seemed less controlled thats great your letting it just flow good work keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]

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