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    dots Submission Name: In Grey Cloudsdots
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    Author: amateur
    Elite Ratio:    4.86 - 19/22/11
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsIn Grey Cloudsdots
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    i feel for a Rope
    in grey clouds
    but It's inconvenienced
    It doesn't have time
    to secure my grip
    no time to tie
    knots of reassurance
    around my troubled soul....
    So, i spit
    and coil
    and cringe
    because i would have time
    were the roles reversed
    But "ten pm is too late"
    or "I have to talk to someone else"
    or "you're not important enough"
    So i cover my bared soul
    with gritted teeth i
    wrap the uncaring Rope around my throat
    and from grey clouds i jump
    in hope that the Rope will catch me--
    drain me of my ignored life




    Submitted on 2005-08-01 16:18:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, powerful poem. Once again I'll warn you I tend to mess up the message >.> So. This is what I felt cause I've gone through this kind of.... Well assuming I get it right.

    You see I have friends who I call to talk and vent to and they help me get out of suicide cutting stuff like that. But sometimes I feel like I'm asking to much from them or it gets to late like 1 a.m. and I don't want to wake them or mess up their lifestyle. Because dealing with me is stressful (( I am a basket case )). So the call is what got me.

    And sometimes there were times when I couldn't get hold of them. And that is when the "not so good" side of me comes out. I wake up with cuts and stuff like that. So that rope upon the throat was symbolism/actuallity. I could take the rope as a knife gun etc. So Theres where I'm probably wrong there.

    But the most powerful message was your quote:
    "in hope that the Rope will catch me --
    drain me of my ignored life"

    Very very very powerful..... yet it is a sad poems. ANd sad poems don't sit well with me, well not in a bad sense. Just that I don't like, well I don't know how to put it into words. Just sadness is good so that we learn how to deal with things.... argh I don't know.

    Beautiful poem, brings something to heart with me.

    -Eric "ACommonCOld" Chang
    Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by acommoncold | [ Reply to This ]



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