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    Author: GuardianAngel
    ASL Info:    16 m fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 46/63/20
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1906
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    Bytes: 525



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    And the rain falls
    as reality comes to her
    She doesn't want him
    Doesn't need him
    Anymore
    And the storm outside
    grows stronger
    As she walks right out
    that door
    The rain washes away
    her warm tears
    As she puts it all behind her
    She doesn't love him
    Anymore...




    Submitted on 2005-08-01 22:15:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reads like a song to me; I can almost hear it to a Byrds-type sound. Your use of the rain and the storm and the tears conveys a cleansing feeling, that not only is she able to walk away, but is able to walk away without feeling pain about it.
    | Posted on 2006-02-20 00:00:00 | by Amelit | [ Reply to This ]
      short simple, could use some more detail possibly, but good job anyway i like most of your stuff keep up the good work! but detail in this one might be helpful
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]


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