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    dots Submission Name: Pretty Girl (Part #1)dots
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    Author: lethargic_me
    ASL Info:    15,chick
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 74/87/22
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 220
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I know some people are not fans of repetiton,but frankly I don't give a damn. Sorry.

    I know it short but its meant to be. It's the start of a story in poem form and this is the first chapter.

    It's about a girl, she has everything and even more. On the outside she's the teen dream but on the inside she's dying.


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    dotsPretty Girl (Part #1)dots
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    She's a pretty girl.
    See her smile.
    She's a pretty girl, her heart stretches miles.

    She's a pretty girl.
    Look in her eyes.
    She's a pretty girl, see all the lies.





    Submitted on 2005-08-02 03:26:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't mind repitition at all, especially in this poem. I like the way you introduced the girl... just enough info to keep us interested, but not so much that it gives everything away. I like where this is going, and I look forward to learning more about this "Pretty Girl".
    ~Melissa~
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by black_beauty18 | [ Reply to This ]
      Would make a good punk song, reminds me of the simplicity of the ramones, wasn't brilliant but it was fun. If you'd like it to be more than just a good punk song, put all the parts together as one piece of work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      i liek that its short and not very i cant say not original but somthign missing okay well im goingto read the other pretty girl ones
    xox reiza
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]



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