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Author:	ladyngold
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Words:	90

Class/Type:	Poetry/Happy
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Alas, I can hear the music,
again so clearly.
It sings of a future
with many rainbow treasures.

Like a falling star,
this song so beautiful
one day faded to an end.
As did my unanswered favors.

Alas, I can hear the music,
and was spared a dreadful life
void of music, love, and poetry.
I should write lyrics to this melody.

Visibly I see treasured dreams flash
fulfilled before my once deaden eyes,
many wishes and dreams coming true.
Recognizing, stars will fall for all times.

Submitted on 2005-08-02 04:11:42 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A building progression here, thoughts surging into realization and a truce-like acceptance. Thing that seem to go, mournfully, unnoticed but do change the world if only a nudge at a time.

This one got me thinking and I like that in a piece. I also like how the lines stretch as the poem moves on, like a little more is realized the further you delve into the thought, like a little glimpse of how another's perceptions grow in size and volosity.

This is especially effective to me because that kind of streching in most people's work tends to give it more strain then it ads to effectiveness. You maintained great poise in executing these lines.

I enjoyed this a great deal.

Jason The [censored]
| Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by Jason The Basta | [ Reply to This ]
  This is Beautiful
To me it speaks of a reawakening with the Lord
Its simply Beautiful
A Great write
Ron

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| Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't know how Munchie got the impression this was dark - whatever he's taking, can I get some? ;-)

Love this poem, Cheryl. Excellent job with wording and flow. The title really drew me in and I'm glad I read it. Only one minor mistake I noted: 'Like a falling stars' shouldn't have the 'a' with the plural subject.

Wonderful.

Peace,

Joe
| Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


psst...I still enjoy reading this

The computer says that comment is too short and there is always something more to add...so I added this sentence...but am gonna have to stick with my original assessment:

psss...I still enjoy reading this

| Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, Cheryl, this was quite different from you, but not out of the ordinary. I liked it. Definately a fave maynard. The third stanza was great...heck the whole thing was man. Thanks for writing it. Have a good one and keep smilin'
| Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  I really thought you did well on this and your muse tells you to relax that all is truly always well because you are a woman who can write and appreciate.
This was beautiful and the stars will fall for you for all times!
Great job girl!
Love,Peace,Joy! tif ; } keep that chin up girl!
| Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked this Cheryl. I wish you would write more poetry, though I do enjoy your Haiku, I feel your poetry speaks so much more of the real you. It appears as though you've had some hard times, according to this poem, but the future holds brighter moments for you.
Good goin. Please do write more poems, you do it so well.
Carol
| Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a lovely and uplifting read Cheryl. It's nice to be able to see the "rainbow treasures" of life, without all the fog of doubt hanging over us isn't it?
Glad to see you heading in a "happy" direction..and glad to see the stars falling for you.
An enjoyable read,
~Sandra
| Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi Cheryl,
This piece is breathtaking...I like how you emphasized on music. Everyone should look up to the heavens at on a clear night. The stars sing and dance with their twinkles. Your stars is writing. You showed passion in this piece. Just like the stars are real, your dreams can become real. Don't give up on what you so desire. You alone know what that desire is. Iwish you the best in making your dream come alive. Your "Star" will shine for you...take care, wanda
| Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
  Cheryl, how intraspective of you, and cryptic to boot!

A very enigmatic write, I still ponder on the use of "alas" which is a strange contradiction.

This could mean a lot of things, and I'm so glad you wrote such an interesting little poem. And you write it extremely well, too.

Very very good!

Be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hello Miss Cheryl,

Long time no hear huh? SORRY! Just been busy!

This was very dark for you. Yet, in another way I felt a sense of hope crying out through it. You gave it a characteristic as though...this is the moment...yet another moment is yet to come...for the stars fall at all times.

Maybe I am just going to deep? I am an over dramatic person ya know?

Great write.

Li Li
| Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]

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