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    dots Submission Name: some kind of lovedots
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    Author: unnatainable
    ASL Info:    20/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 48/42/23
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 840
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 325



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    dotssome kind of lovedots
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    If I could write you name in blood,
    I would write it on my heart
    If falling felt like I was dying
    I swear one day that we will part

    If a sickness was a feeling
    On the inside takes away the pain
    I would fall asleep to you screaming
    And wash away the tears again




    Submitted on 2005-08-02 05:01:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really loved this peice, it had a great flow to it and was just the right length, it didn't seem like it lacked or needed anything. The only thing wrong with it is I think that on the first line you should be your.
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]


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