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    dots Submission Name: Dance of the Coquetdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 549
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    Description:
       I just started a belly dancing class and was trying to come up with a piece.
    It's very good exercise and is very good for your self-esteem because it's very provocative, creative and makes you feel so sexy!

    Love,Peace,Joy!!!


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    dotsDance of the Coquetdots
    -------------------------------------------


    A seductive glance
    from beneath
    smoky, painted
    eyes

    the Middle Eastern
    music stirring
    my middle and my
    thighs

    The words through
    my hips and
    fingers
    flows

    The beat is
    driving passion,
    then
    slows

    My naked body
    carefully
    veiled

    The rhythm, words
    with my spirit
    meld

    Swirling,
    twirling
    in the coquettish
    lover's dance

    Inviting,
    coaxing
    gifts of needing
    glance





    Submitted on 2005-08-02 13:03:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is very interesting. It sounds like it's...fun, to be in a belly dancing class. I think I may just take one now...I like how you described the feeling. It's kind of short, but very descriptive. I like it.
    Nice job.
    *Melissa
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by frozenconscienc | [ Reply to This ]
      very nicelly said i like reading poetry as i read i ty to place myself in the mind of the writer as well as the characters they talk about
    very enjoyable read
    thanx for you comment on identity it is a very deep poem it talks about the pesonalities in me when i sit down to write
    thanx again sandman
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Very sexy, I liked it alot, the feeling in this is described very well.
    The words through
    my hips and
    fingers
    flows

    The beat is
    driving passion,
    then
    slows
    These have to be my favorite lines I enjoy everthing that you write and want to thank you for sharing it with everyone
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by ceestyl | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh now, I feel sexy now girlfriend! This was HOT. I liked it. I felt you had the reader watching you dance. This was great writing. Great Job.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I can see the bodies move to the beat of the middle eastren music.
    That music to hypnotic so pure.

    Indeed it is hot in here
    the sexy feeling has taken over this post.
    now it is time for me to cool off....

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      Very sexual but in a more beautiful way, it's very subtle to me. Nice to read poems as interpreted by someone closer to my age. This is more for adults i believe.
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiff, you really have gone into the music and dance, and in this poem you take the reader along for the ride.
    Very sensually portrayed, in the same feeling as the dance one can imagine as one reads.

    Simply excellent work...veils eh? no! I won't I won't!

    Must go and adjust my clothing...

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      how very provocative and sensual, Tif! me likey... belly dancing is not that easy, is it? you sure do develop some good muscles though, don'tcha? i'm so glad you've found this outlet for yourself, what a wonderful thing for you. will you post us a pic in your belly dancing outfit? i absolutely adore Middle Eastern music, it just goes right to my soul and gives me this dreamy feeling. it's very intoxicating.
    dance on, girlfriend!
    @ Cat
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      OHHHH TIFFF! hun if i weren't so beguiled by cleo I might just have to come to "everywhere yet nowhere" (wherever the hell that is) and get sum of that belly dancin stuff. Oh yeah! Friggin great poem.
    your friend
    ben
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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