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    dots Submission Name: Raindots

    Author: Heavens Rebel
    ASL Info:    20/Female/Essex
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 9/9/5
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I wrote this while looking out of my bedroom window, it was raining. Started off about rain and ended about a guy I am very much in deep like with :)

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    I watch the rain drops, roll down the window
    Behind which i am captured,
    Gazing out and upwards into the sky,
    Listening to the sound of the violent drops of water hit the ground,
    Thoughts make puddles in my head,
    Ponds, rivers and seas,
    Deep and flowing with thoughts of he,
    Watching the pouring sky,
    I close my eyes,
    Imagining his face,
    Remembering his smell,
    Feeling those feelings which i would never dare tell,
    Thoughts of him flood my rivers,
    Rain drops full of passion,
    Hitting the ground with every beat of my heart,
    Each one falls harder than they did at the start.

    Submitted on 2005-08-02 15:17:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Theres many things i like about this poem. The main thing i love, is the effectiveness of your imagery, your references to the rain in conjunction to the person you long for. Good work, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by hollowshell | [ Reply to This ]

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