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    dots Submission Name: Best frienddots
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    Author: Rue
    ASL Info:    16/F/the dark side
    Elite Ratio:    4.54 - 244/182/44
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    Description:
       Man, people can suck sometimes. A lot of the time I just want it to me, one close friend, and a big bag of weed for the rest of time. Food would be nice too. And Mello Yello. O.o
    I'm sure this piece isn't perfect as i wrote it spur of the moment while listening to some pink floyd song.


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    dotsBest frienddots
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    For you I searched and scoured,
    Any place I thought you might be,
    Climbing great tall towers,
    Using every chance to see.

    Search the Amsterdam coffee house,
    The Canadian border-line,
    In every hole of every mouse,
    Behind every oak and pine.

    And you'll own every Zeppelin album,
    Have Jim Morrison on your door,
    Dressing in plaid and denim,
    We'll split our stash and soar.

    With you things are just grande,
    Climbing to the moon,
    You'll stop my fall and catch my hand,
    We'll be there by noon.

    The trip home is just as fun,
    The Milky Way was sweet,
    It slid us past the sun,
    And I'm so glad my search led us to meet.




    Submitted on 2005-08-02 16:13:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sounds like a poem on an acid trip :-) which i'm sure was intentional, but I liked it , just try to put a lil' more detail into it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, it seems to me like you and your best friend are one in the same, which is good. It does kinda sound like a poem on an acid trip, but at least you and your friend are trippin' together, right? LoL, I like this one, it shows talent.
    ~Melissa~
    | Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by black_beauty18 | [ Reply to This ]


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