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    dots Submission Name: I Could Stop Loving Youdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       I just started thinking last night, "If he would leave me alone, if I could get away from him, if I forgot how his skin felt, etc. then I could get over all this." And then I remembered that, no, I couldn't. It's as pointless as trying to make my heart stop by thinking about it. Loving him comes as naturally to me as breathing.


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    If I could stop seeing your face
    If I could stop hearing your voice
    If I could stop touching your skin
    If I had any other choice
    If I could stop looking into your eyes
    If I could quit hearing you say my name
    If you would keep your hands to yourself
    If things between us could ever change
    If I couldn't see you walk through my door
    If I couldn't hear you moan
    If I couldn't feel you inside of me
    If you would only leave me alone
    If you would stop looking at me
    If you would stop listening to my words
    If you would forget the way my body feels
    If you remembered anything you've heard
    If I could suck the breath from my lungs
    If my world was more than just us two
    If I could keep my heart from beating
    Then I could stop loving you.




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      If I could keep my heart from beating
    Then I could stop loving you.

    I love those lines,
    This poem has such a sad tone to it...
    The only thing I can say is that I'd like to see some periods and commas or something. other wise good job.
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]
      Yep...felt this way many many times. Sometimes no matter how much we want it to go away..and no matter how much we try to MAKE it go away...love just stays. But maybe that's the beauty of it? Anyway this was great...keep it up! ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the fact that you are so strong in your words, as if you are being somewhat defiant with them. It makes a very good visual. It kind of remined me of some of my work, but in a compeltely different way. I say this not to say you are not unique because you are, just that I am going through something that reminds of your poem so I can relate.
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by BeautifulGrace | [ Reply to This ]


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