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abraxas


Author: love gone wrong
ASL Info:    27/m/colorado
Elite Ratio:    2.14 - 337 /381 /42
Words: 27
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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abraxas



lithium dreams
surreal visions
an abraxas....
of mind and soul
sweet nothings
whispered
absorbed
tucked away....
in mind's depths
the abyssal plain
the memory morgue
awaiting...
cremation




Submitted on 2004-04-13 16:25:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hmmmmmmmm, 'lithium dreams' i can feel that and i think you know why. I thought it was quite riveting, the imagery lovely and almost sinister. I liked the feel of it though i'm not sure waht you've tried to say with this one. I've got some ideas however, but i firmly stick to the adage that ASS-umptions make an ASS out of U and ME.
| Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by Voodoo_Lounge | [ Reply to This ]
  Interesting... it would probably help if I knew what an "abraxas" was! But hey, I have a HUGE vocabulary, so you get big points for using a word I don't know. Taken in context... maybe a fusion? It seems very dark, almost morbid. I like it now, I'll like it better when you explain it to me! <><
| Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
  ok ok...i would like this poem way more if i knew wtf 'abraxas' meant. Wasn't that a persian general or sumthin? But since I see my old friend lithium (he's all over the place these days) i suppose i approve.
shard
| Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]


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